Christine's Poems
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Now as you sit upon the porch and gaze out to the sea
Keep searching for my ship's return, one day you will see me.
You'll see me smile,I'll take your hand together we will go
To where life's journey does return, and only we will know.
what a touching poem, pulling at my heart-strings. A most impressive piece, Christine and had I a six, it would be yours.
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2015
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Now as you sit upon the porch and gaze out to the sea
Keep searching for my ship's return, one day you will see me.
You'll see me smile,I'll take your hand together we will go
To where life's journey does return, and only we will know.
what a touching poem, pulling at my heart-strings. A most impressive piece, Christine and had I a six, it would be yours.
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2015
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Thank you Margaret for your great feedback and comments for my poem , I enjoyed this challenge and loved reading everyone elses poetry also . I think we have a good group and its just nice being a part of them. Really appreciate you words
With Cheers Christine
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Chrissy,
This poem is magnificent. You did such a good job putting a story into a piece that has fantastic rhythm and well chosen rhymes. My only complaint that the color text you chose was hard on my eyes.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Hi Chrissy,
This poem is magnificent. You did such a good job putting a story into a piece that has fantastic rhythm and well chosen rhymes. My only complaint that the color text you chose was hard on my eyes.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 28-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Hi Lou Thank you for you great review and rating for my poem, sorry about the colour text I tried to simulate a burning torch colour with the orange font on the grey background, but really appreciate you feedback for next time. Cheers Christine
Comment from Eric1
Hi Christine, this is by far the best of these challenges that I have read to date, your beautiful rhyming story in a poem deserves a ten and if I were allowed I would award one,
The flow of this superior work is truly outstanding, the rhythm is wonderful and the words a cornucopia of beauty, you really are gifted my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Hi Christine, this is by far the best of these challenges that I have read to date, your beautiful rhyming story in a poem deserves a ten and if I were allowed I would award one,
The flow of this superior work is truly outstanding, the rhythm is wonderful and the words a cornucopia of beauty, you really are gifted my friend.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Oh Eric you make me cry with your beautiful words for my poem And I thank you from the bottom of my heart. I loved writimg this one, and I am so honoured by your lovely review and exceptional rating. I guess sometimes the words just flow out and I am so happy you though so highly . ( Also thank you as your review now gives me my very first all time favourite rating which I will always treasure becaue it came from you , so my friend I thank you sincerely, you have made my day with your beautiful words As always appreciation and a huge Cheers Christine😀😀😀
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Christine you earned those stars, you should never under estimate your wonderful ability to write brilliant smooth poetry, because you already do my friend.
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Oh Eric what a lovely thing to say and it is alway great to have someone else acknowledge your work with such praise so I accept with a gracious thanks you. i love to write and guess i am a bit 'old fashion in my style as I love to read a good poem with rhyme and meter that flows so that is my yard stick for my work. Cheers Christine
Comment from pharp
Christine,
WOW!!!!! My friend you really nailed this one. What an exceptional job you have done in the penning of this poem and met the challenge. Superb rhyming and meter. Very smooth flow and just a beautifully written poem that I enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing, girl you can write!!!!!!!!
Blessings..................Portia
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Christine,
WOW!!!!! My friend you really nailed this one. What an exceptional job you have done in the penning of this poem and met the challenge. Superb rhyming and meter. Very smooth flow and just a beautifully written poem that I enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing, girl you can write!!!!!!!!
Blessings..................Portia
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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OH Portia, Thank you so very much for this wonderful review for my poem and for you 6 star rating. I am so pleased that you thought this worthy and also to have you say it is just a beautifully wrotren poem from you that means a lot . So my friend as alway appreciate you feedback and i look forward to catching you again A big Chhers to you Christine😃😃
Comment from pattipac
Love this sea-faring tale, Christine. It makes me mindful of all the stories I have read about widows watching out to sea; never giving up hope that their lovers will return.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Love this sea-faring tale, Christine. It makes me mindful of all the stories I have read about widows watching out to sea; never giving up hope that their lovers will return.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you pattipac for you absolutely lovely word and review and For giving this a 6 star rating. much appreciated. I enjoyed writing this and what a great group of poets to ne associated with and what fun it is to read everyones poetry ( in and out of the challenges ) I so enjoy you support A big Cheers Christine😃😃
Comment from barkingdog
I thought I'd jump over to your page and read your offering.
What a lovely story. I rode the waves with the tossing ship and watched him fall overboard to where he rests on the sea floor. He heard her cry to stay with her and so he does. He waits to take her with him on her final day of life.
Such a smooth easy flowing piece. Excellent rhyming quatrains. I totally enjoyed it.
:) ellen
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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I thought I'd jump over to your page and read your offering.
What a lovely story. I rode the waves with the tossing ship and watched him fall overboard to where he rests on the sea floor. He heard her cry to stay with her and so he does. He waits to take her with him on her final day of life.
Such a smooth easy flowing piece. Excellent rhyming quatrains. I totally enjoyed it.
:) ellen
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thank you Ellen very much ( I miscounted the pumps and have landed on page one which I will not do again, and I feel so humbled to be amongst such fine writers for these challenges and find everyone has written really worthy poetry. so thanks for reading and reviewing my offering also Cheers Christine😀
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I almost did that one time. I meant to put in nine and somehow it went to nineteen.
Luckily I didn't have enough pumps and got a message reminding that I was poor. LOL
Comment from LeslieP5
I like this romantic tale of the fishing boat and fishermen who were overcome by the storm and drowned. Yet he hears his love call to him to come home and he stays on the ocean floor, with her for life, waiting until she can join him and together they will go: "My darling I am coming home, for you just wait and see I didn't drown that fateful day, into the deepest sea. I hear you call me every night, you sit upon the porch And wait for me now to return, I see your burning torch" ..."You'll see me smile, 'll take your hand together we will go
To where life's journey does return, and only we will know." My kind of true love story.
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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I like this romantic tale of the fishing boat and fishermen who were overcome by the storm and drowned. Yet he hears his love call to him to come home and he stays on the ocean floor, with her for life, waiting until she can join him and together they will go: "My darling I am coming home, for you just wait and see I didn't drown that fateful day, into the deepest sea. I hear you call me every night, you sit upon the porch And wait for me now to return, I see your burning torch" ..."You'll see me smile, 'll take your hand together we will go
To where life's journey does return, and only we will know." My kind of true love story.
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much Leslie for reading and reviewing my poem with such lovely comments. Yes a bit of a one for a sad love story but the image inspired this and I enjoyed writng this one so with much appreciation for your time and words . Cheers for your support Christine😃
Comment from lightink
I am out of words! I had to pause and gather myself before writing this. It's beautifully written and very touching story on eternal love! The writing turns around and the first words change meaning by the end in a heartbreaking yet heartfelt way! I loved your response to this image! Very good and heartfelt writing. I was withholding my breath without knowing it for a while during reading!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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I am out of words! I had to pause and gather myself before writing this. It's beautifully written and very touching story on eternal love! The writing turns around and the first words change meaning by the end in a heartbreaking yet heartfelt way! I loved your response to this image! Very good and heartfelt writing. I was withholding my breath without knowing it for a while during reading!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Oh lightink what a beautiful review for my poem I am delighted you feel this way, it is one of my favourites and loved creating this tale of heartbreak from this image which just seemed to flow out so I am thrilled with such a lovely response. With much appreciation for your time Cheers Christine😃
Comment from ByeByeBirdie
Now as you sit upon the porch and gaze out to the sea
Keep searching for my ship's return, one day you will see me.
You'll see me smile,I'll take your hand together we will go
To where life's journey does return, and only we will know." You can not get a better final stanza than you did. :)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Now as you sit upon the porch and gaze out to the sea
Keep searching for my ship's return, one day you will see me.
You'll see me smile,I'll take your hand together we will go
To where life's journey does return, and only we will know." You can not get a better final stanza than you did. :)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much Ella Rosie Cheeks for you lovely review and so glad my final stanza summed this poem up so well for you I enjoyed this write and am humble to be in such fine company Appreciate your comments very much Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Nosha17
The sea has claimed many such lives throughout time. I liked your descriptions and imagery of the raging sea and how you remembered a loved one as the ship went down. Excellent rhyming and an enjoyable read. faye
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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The sea has claimed many such lives throughout time. I liked your descriptions and imagery of the raging sea and how you remembered a loved one as the ship went down. Excellent rhyming and an enjoyable read. faye
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Thanks Faye for your time and to read and review my poem for this challenge. The poem just seemed to flow out once I fot started and as always Appreciate your support for my work Cheers Christine😃