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Comment from Bill Schott
This limerick, Fickle Love, takes a bit of figuring as the matchups are a bit dizzying at first. I guess, in the end, Ben gets Jill and Bill gets Jen.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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This limerick, Fickle Love, takes a bit of figuring as the matchups are a bit dizzying at first. I guess, in the end, Ben gets Jill and Bill gets Jen.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2015
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Hi Bill yes it is a bit confusing I even got confused while writing this lol but thanks heaps for reading and giving it a great review Cheers
Comment from misscookie
Wow1
This was a great read.
This is what I call a food for thought poem for sure..... meaning after you read it you go mm.
I'm not sure I'm ready for this yet. LOL
Cookie
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Wow1
This was a great read.
This is what I call a food for thought poem for sure..... meaning after you read it you go mm.
I'm not sure I'm ready for this yet. LOL
Cookie
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Hi Cookie .Thanks for reading my limerick and giving it a great review. .Not sure if I'm ready for it either lol glad you stooped by Cheers😃
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You're very welcome.
Have a nice day.
Cookie
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Talk about form and style! It was easy to get the syllable count, but you really wrote a good, but confusing limerick, as it should be.
-I see this as a very complex math problem--one of those involved word problems with logic.
-I have no other reviews to go by, so I have to conclude that somehow everyone is with the person they want to be, one way or the other!
-Good job!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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-Talk about form and style! It was easy to get the syllable count, but you really wrote a good, but confusing limerick, as it should be.
-I see this as a very complex math problem--one of those involved word problems with logic.
-I have no other reviews to go by, so I have to conclude that somehow everyone is with the person they want to be, one way or the other!
-Good job!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Hi respa1. so glad you thought it a good job I had a bit of fun trying to work out the end result No logic used I'm afraid, but I needed Ben to end up with Jill lol Cheers for your encouraging words.
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You did a very good job, and you definitely had a puzzle. I don't know how you did that!!
Comment from honeytree
I felt the art work was very fitting
for the words of this poem that has been
written, great creativity and poem in many ways.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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I felt the art work was very fitting
for the words of this poem that has been
written, great creativity and poem in many ways.
Honeytree
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thanks Honeytree for your terrific review and comments, I always try to do something a bot different lol so glad you liked it Cheers
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Great to read
Annie
Comment from kiwijenny
where have we ben?
Jill-ted lovers again
Jen-erous....with thrills...on them hills
What was the bill? For the thrills....and who got who? In the end
Cos trying to get it straight twisted me round the Ben-d
God bless
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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where have we ben?
Jill-ted lovers again
Jen-erous....with thrills...on them hills
What was the bill? For the thrills....and who got who? In the end
Cos trying to get it straight twisted me round the Ben-d
God bless
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Ha ha kiwijenny yes a bit like that for this one I nearly went round the ben....d trying to put it altogether but glad it worked love your clever review Cheers
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, A fun limerick and a brain twister too.
Of note:
Then Bill he found out about Jen
Who loved him instead of young Ben
From Bill, Ben stole Jill
This gave her a thrill
Cause not Bill she loved but her Ben
(Ohhh, the confusion of the heart or could it be confusion from a pint of beer and a few shots of whiskey - lol.)
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hello author, A fun limerick and a brain twister too.
Of note:
Then Bill he found out about Jen
Who loved him instead of young Ben
From Bill, Ben stole Jill
This gave her a thrill
Cause not Bill she loved but her Ben
(Ohhh, the confusion of the heart or could it be confusion from a pint of beer and a few shots of whiskey - lol.)
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hi Latebloomer Thank you for stopping by to have a read and giving this a great review and rating . I think I had better stay of the beer and whisky as the wine is enough if this is what it produces ha ha Cheers
Comment from twinklepoems
Is this the poetic version of "Bill, Carol, Ted and Alice"? I really hope everyone got who they deserved! It all flows well except the last line does not flow quite as well as your other lines (but I don't know why). Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Is this the poetic version of "Bill, Carol, Ted and Alice"? I really hope everyone got who they deserved! It all flows well except the last line does not flow quite as well as your other lines (but I don't know why). Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hi twinklepoems I thank you for your review and tend to agree about the last line so have made a small change and hope it reads more smoothly now. Just having some fun with this genre and sometimes not sure what comes oir of my brain lol Cheers and thanks
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve
For Bill and Ben and Jill and Jen I couldn't get my tongue round them
And if this lot were lesbian gays they'd tangle up in different ways
That might have been a lot less natural than this limerick of love's quadrilateral
Fun suite from the emerald isle.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve
For Bill and Ben and Jill and Jen I couldn't get my tongue round them
And if this lot were lesbian gays they'd tangle up in different ways
That might have been a lot less natural than this limerick of love's quadrilateral
Fun suite from the emerald isle.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hi panygynt. A big thanks for your dissective review and great rating I had fun reading it and enjoyed your fun comments. Cheers for your time
Comment from Louise Michelle
Haha - this is fun to read. Of course I had to go through it a couple times to get everyone straight. Actually, I'm still not sure who's the loser. I guess it's Bill. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Haha - this is fun to read. Of course I had to go through it a couple times to get everyone straight. Actually, I'm still not sure who's the loser. I guess it's Bill. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hi Lou yes I think Bill is the loser here got lost myself a few times lol but enjoyed your review and really appreciate your support for this one So Thanks and sending Cheers
Comment from MacMhuirich
Well Bill, Ben, Jill and Jen seem to have a real roller-coaster life, and that's without Jack and his bucket arriving on the scene. Loved your humour and this is a lovely read. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Well Bill, Ben, Jill and Jen seem to have a real roller-coaster life, and that's without Jack and his bucket arriving on the scene. Loved your humour and this is a lovely read. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you John for reading and reviewing my limerick. heavens no we don't need Jack All too confusing as is Enjoyed your comments and thanks for your best wishes Cheers