A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Where Is He"Assorted poems of love
23 total reviews
Comment from G.B. Smith
OH Missy
This is such a bewildering poem and thought
It caused me to think of how different each of us truly is
then how mortal our lives really are. Life is what it is.
The loneliness is real and deep felt and truly deserved the 6th star
Bear
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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OH Missy
This is such a bewildering poem and thought
It caused me to think of how different each of us truly is
then how mortal our lives really are. Life is what it is.
The loneliness is real and deep felt and truly deserved the 6th star
Bear
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Blessings to you, my sweet friend. You will always have a place here in this old girls heart :)
Thanks for this review and take care of yourself. I have been praying for you so hard :)
Missy
Comment from CR Delport
Sometimes you find love in the most unlikely places. Yes, I found this pleasing :) As always, it is very well written and well presented. Good job.
Take care.
Christelle.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Sometimes you find love in the most unlikely places. Yes, I found this pleasing :) As always, it is very well written and well presented. Good job.
Take care.
Christelle.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Christelle, thanks hon. It always makes me feel like I am becoming a writer when a writer such as you admires my work.
xoxo
Missy
Comment from l.raven
HI Missing, I think their will be a lot who will relate to this one...will I be alone the rest of my life??? it's sad missy...if you don't die before your mate...the rest of your life could be lonely...very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo love
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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HI Missing, I think their will be a lot who will relate to this one...will I be alone the rest of my life??? it's sad missy...if you don't die before your mate...the rest of your life could be lonely...very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Thank you, sweetie for this understanding review. There are a some who are in relationships and are still very much ALONE. Some that don't know when the feelings turned off but they have and now find themselves sharing a life but one with no soul...no love.
Always,
Missy
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I know just what you are saying Missy...we are born to love and want to be loved....when that isn't there...it's sad...xxoo you are so welcome sweet girl...Linda
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Big ol hug for you too sweetie xx
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big hugs back at ya...smiling...xxoo
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Missy,
words and thoughts such as these... well, leave me sad and a tad hollow... thinking of all the people out there who don't have that special person to share eternity with...but on the other side of the coin makes me more appreciative of what I have... yes, these words leave their mark in a very lingering and sobering fashion.
Seen as though you write from your heart, I can only assume these thoughts were captured in a real-life moment... and my wish for you if they are, is of course, to find the partner that will cherish every magic moment with you...'cause, you and that giant heart of yours deserves the chance to sing the melodies of true love... yes, a wonderfully constructed and presented poem Missy.
With our thoughts we create,
manifestation of love,
James vx's
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Hi Missy,
words and thoughts such as these... well, leave me sad and a tad hollow... thinking of all the people out there who don't have that special person to share eternity with...but on the other side of the coin makes me more appreciative of what I have... yes, these words leave their mark in a very lingering and sobering fashion.
Seen as though you write from your heart, I can only assume these thoughts were captured in a real-life moment... and my wish for you if they are, is of course, to find the partner that will cherish every magic moment with you...'cause, you and that giant heart of yours deserves the chance to sing the melodies of true love... yes, a wonderfully constructed and presented poem Missy.
With our thoughts we create,
manifestation of love,
James vx's
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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You assume correctly, James my friend.
I am delighted that you are on the other side of this with one who cherishes you!! Never let her doubt it for one moment, your love :)
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment from Zachary_Edmond
A very very powerful piece that i think, many can relate to! That is your strength, your sheer ability to say what is felt in the deepest parts of our selves, and to say it all in a handful of lines! Great.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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A very very powerful piece that i think, many can relate to! That is your strength, your sheer ability to say what is felt in the deepest parts of our selves, and to say it all in a handful of lines! Great.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Zach, thank you so much :) Sometimes, I think less is more :)
Missy
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sadly, your poem is a fitting description of the thoughts and conditions of so many hearts and minds. Searching, needing, wanting, but unsure of who or what, and many times why. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Sadly, your poem is a fitting description of the thoughts and conditions of so many hearts and minds. Searching, needing, wanting, but unsure of who or what, and many times why. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Ric for this lovely review :) I am all those things .. lol
Missy
Comment from NJK62
A quiet, reflective poem. Largely this poem works because of the line division, which gives each thought emphasis as it moves towards its conclusion. I like the enjambment of 'ever find me?' after the triplet 'Will the one whose smile I can't live without/ Whose touch drives me wild/ The one whose arms I want to lie in night after night,' which drives the reader forward. There is also an effective contrast between the excitement of the fantasy contained within this triplet and the emptiness of the concluding triplet 'wine glass, my pen/And ... hope.' Finally, the simplicity of the style gives this poem and authentic voice. Well done. I did find it 'pleasing'!!!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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A quiet, reflective poem. Largely this poem works because of the line division, which gives each thought emphasis as it moves towards its conclusion. I like the enjambment of 'ever find me?' after the triplet 'Will the one whose smile I can't live without/ Whose touch drives me wild/ The one whose arms I want to lie in night after night,' which drives the reader forward. There is also an effective contrast between the excitement of the fantasy contained within this triplet and the emptiness of the concluding triplet 'wine glass, my pen/And ... hope.' Finally, the simplicity of the style gives this poem and authentic voice. Well done. I did find it 'pleasing'!!!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Thank you NJK, for this detailed review of my work. I am afraid I have a lot of homework ahead...me and websters. I am not very up to snuff on some of the terms used here. ie: enjambment...triplet. I am learning, however. :) It is part of the reason I came to FanStory.
I am delighted that you found this "pleasing".
Always,
Missy
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I think there's real potential in your writing. Enjambment is the use of a line whose sense and/or rhythm continues to the next line. It is sometimes called a 'run-on line'. I look forward to reading more of your poetry in the future.
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That "pleases" me :)
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Good.
Comment from mfowler
This is a sweet entreaty to fate. The sadness pervades the poem as the voice wonders why the romance she sees all around (even in the glances of lovers) will ever come into her life. In the end there is a resignation in the voice. This will not happen and, in so saying, seeks
solace in the wine and the poetry of passion she can create.
The lines and language in this are a vast improvement. I can't find a thing to add or take which shows you've been either more discerning choice or you've done the editing really well.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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This is a sweet entreaty to fate. The sadness pervades the poem as the voice wonders why the romance she sees all around (even in the glances of lovers) will ever come into her life. In the end there is a resignation in the voice. This will not happen and, in so saying, seeks
solace in the wine and the poetry of passion she can create.
The lines and language in this are a vast improvement. I can't find a thing to add or take which shows you've been either more discerning choice or you've done the editing really well.
Excellent.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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I have been listening, Teach. Thank you.
Missy
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Top marks, Missy. God, that sounds condescending. Sorry.
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I'll take condescending from you :)
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I'll take condescending from you :)
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I'll take condescending from you :)
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Not my usual style, I hope. But teaching all my life often leaves me saying things I wish I could swallow.
Comment from lightink
I think we all know how this feels, maybe a cat instead of wine - but small details :)! You conveyed the logins and loneliness really well!
The ending is precious: wine and longing! :)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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I think we all know how this feels, maybe a cat instead of wine - but small details :)! You conveyed the logins and loneliness really well!
The ending is precious: wine and longing! :)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Kisses, LL.
thank you for this sweet review :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from scongrove
I just love this Missy. I can just see you on a blanket, sipping wine and writing this as you sit by the ocean. I felt these exact words many times. I always thought I would never find a mate that belongs for me. I guess God finally heard my wish because he did bring a wonderful mate just made for me. We've been together a year now. Keep dreaming and asking. You will get your gift when it's time.
I can just feel your emotions in each line you wrote. Brings back so many memories of me as I wished for someone as I went on long walks. Thank you for sharing this. Speaks to my heart.
Shana :) BTW ... this deserves a ten! :)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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I just love this Missy. I can just see you on a blanket, sipping wine and writing this as you sit by the ocean. I felt these exact words many times. I always thought I would never find a mate that belongs for me. I guess God finally heard my wish because he did bring a wonderful mate just made for me. We've been together a year now. Keep dreaming and asking. You will get your gift when it's time.
I can just feel your emotions in each line you wrote. Brings back so many memories of me as I wished for someone as I went on long walks. Thank you for sharing this. Speaks to my heart.
Shana :) BTW ... this deserves a ten! :)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Wow... Best any of us can Hope for is to touch someone, thank you for this :)
Big ol hug!!!
Missy