Tall Trees
just describing trees11 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Teri
what a nice 5-7-5 poem about trees
There are so many trees such as the lilac trees, blossoms on fruit trees that we cane enjoy their fragrance
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Hello Teri
what a nice 5-7-5 poem about trees
There are so many trees such as the lilac trees, blossoms on fruit trees that we cane enjoy their fragrance
Gert
Comment Written 10-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
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Thank you Gert for the great review. It is so nice to see you again. hugs, Teri
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Smiles to you Teri
Gert
Comment from angel123
I love trees I think they are spiritual. I enjoyed reading your nice nature poem. It flows with the sway of the trees. Good alliteration of words tall trees, mesmerize me and sweet smell.
Angel123
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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I love trees I think they are spiritual. I enjoyed reading your nice nature poem. It flows with the sway of the trees. Good alliteration of words tall trees, mesmerize me and sweet smell.
Angel123
Comment Written 09-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015
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Thank you very much for the great review. hugs, Teri
Comment from TPAC
I like trees too. Writer in my opinion lacks sufficient items for this stir. Great subject selection but reference of scent might elevate read.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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I like trees too. Writer in my opinion lacks sufficient items for this stir. Great subject selection but reference of scent might elevate read.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the review and the help. I didn't even think of smell. Teri
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Nice 5/7/5, good job with the syllable count. The content of the poem is repetitious ... the tall trees.. you wrote it twice. I think it would improve greatly if you change the last line.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Hello :)
Nice 5/7/5, good job with the syllable count. The content of the poem is repetitious ... the tall trees.. you wrote it twice. I think it would improve greatly if you change the last line.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you for your review and for your suggestion. I will check that out. Teri
Comment from Brett Matthew West
It is okay. Trees do add so much to the landscape and serve so many different purposes from providing homes for animals to firewood. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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It is okay. Trees do add so much to the landscape and serve so many different purposes from providing homes for animals to firewood. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you for your review. It gave me some new insight on this poem. Teri
Comment from Jackarrie
I love the image and the syllables are all correct. I am not sure about repeating "the tall trees in the satori line.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
You could write, the first line." In the breeze they sway"
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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I love the image and the syllables are all correct. I am not sure about repeating "the tall trees in the satori line.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
You could write, the first line." In the breeze they sway"
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you Mary for your review and your suggestions. Teri
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a good write, mystery writer, I think it would read better if you connected the first two lines and make a long sentence instead of three short ones. I love the picture choice. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
example
the tall trees sway and
their colors mesmerize me
majestic marvels
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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this is a good write, mystery writer, I think it would read better if you connected the first two lines and make a long sentence instead of three short ones. I love the picture choice. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
example
the tall trees sway and
their colors mesmerize me
majestic marvels
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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hello friend. I am back finally. Thank you for the great review. Teri
Comment from l.raven
I too love trees...it makes me so mad when I see them cut them down...and the big ones are worse...they can keep the junk mail...leave the trees alone...Love your poem...very well written and a beautiful picture
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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I too love trees...it makes me so mad when I see them cut them down...and the big ones are worse...they can keep the junk mail...leave the trees alone...Love your poem...very well written and a beautiful picture
Comment Written 08-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the great review my friend. hugs, Teri
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you are so welcome Teri...xxoo luff
Comment from JCarriger
I love the 5-7-5 type poetry. It takes a mastery of language, music and talent to make a "complete" visual in the smallest of rooms.
The first two lines, I moved, I saw breeze, I saw all the rainbow of greens.
I was disappointed in the last line. One can assume you love trees, why bother to give it subject. What can you tell me about tall trees I wouldn't know if you didn't paint me a picture you started so well.
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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I love the 5-7-5 type poetry. It takes a mastery of language, music and talent to make a "complete" visual in the smallest of rooms.
The first two lines, I moved, I saw breeze, I saw all the rainbow of greens.
I was disappointed in the last line. One can assume you love trees, why bother to give it subject. What can you tell me about tall trees I wouldn't know if you didn't paint me a picture you started so well.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the review. Teri
Comment from anabellapongasi
The tall trees do sway
Their colors mesmerize me
I love the tall trees
I like this simple poem about trees written in 5-7-5 format for this contest. If I may make a suggestion: I would get rid of the repetition of "tall trees" in the last line as you already mentioned tall trees in the first line, and think of something else to make the poem stronger.
Like maybe "dancing in the wind" -Just a suggestion.
Best to you in the contest.
Blessings,
Anabella
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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The tall trees do sway
Their colors mesmerize me
I love the tall trees
I like this simple poem about trees written in 5-7-5 format for this contest. If I may make a suggestion: I would get rid of the repetition of "tall trees" in the last line as you already mentioned tall trees in the first line, and think of something else to make the poem stronger.
Like maybe "dancing in the wind" -Just a suggestion.
Best to you in the contest.
Blessings,
Anabella
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the great review and the great suggestions. hugs, Teri