Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10004 "peeking bird"from birth I have longed for death
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Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
So beautifully written. It flows off the tongue like water. The artwork is perfect for this poem. By far you are one of my favorite writers. Please keep writing and sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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So beautifully written. It flows off the tongue like water. The artwork is perfect for this poem. By far you are one of my favorite writers. Please keep writing and sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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I don't deserve your kind reviews but thank you!
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Oh yes you really do. You are a fantastic writer. it takes a lot to impress me yet every item you write grabs me, holds me, and grips me. Please keep sharing. You have great knowledge and wisdom within you that is itching to get out. Let it flow into your works.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
What a very good poem about a little bird coming to your window. I can just picture it peeping in and watching TV with you, and taunting your dogs.
I like the way the poem looks, too. It's short and choppy like a little bird hopping around and pecking. Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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What a very good poem about a little bird coming to your window. I can just picture it peeping in and watching TV with you, and taunting your dogs.
I like the way the poem looks, too. It's short and choppy like a little bird hopping around and pecking. Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you again.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job! I like your poem. It has good rhythm and a nice flow. The format is attractive and easy to read. I don't see anything to change is perfect the way it is.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Good job! I like your poem. It has good rhythm and a nice flow. The format is attractive and easy to read. I don't see anything to change is perfect the way it is.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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You are always encouraging, just please don't spare me if I am writing stupid.
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no cbat, what i wrote is true, you did a good job
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi. This is a sweet little poem tracking the regular appearance of a small bird at your window. Another explanation could be that he is checking out his reflection in the glass - many birds do that.
It will be interesting to see if he keeps coming, especially if you start feeding him.
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Hi. This is a sweet little poem tracking the regular appearance of a small bird at your window. Another explanation could be that he is checking out his reflection in the glass - many birds do that.
It will be interesting to see if he keeps coming, especially if you start feeding him.
Steve
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Thank you.
It makes a better explanation. If he was watching me, once would have been enough.
Even birds have good taste. Funny! will he think the crumbs are in good taste?
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Seed probably better...
Comment from AvL
Are birds people-watchers? CBAT raises this implicit question in her minimalist birdsong. Each four-line stanza hops to the next, like a bird on the ground. The poet's "crumby" invitation to her volant visitor makes us all wonder what will happen next in this mini-drama. As a fellow "birdbrain" -- I have written many haiku on various birds -- I give this poem five tweets. Thank you, CBAT.
Haiku-guy
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Are birds people-watchers? CBAT raises this implicit question in her minimalist birdsong. Each four-line stanza hops to the next, like a bird on the ground. The poet's "crumby" invitation to her volant visitor makes us all wonder what will happen next in this mini-drama. As a fellow "birdbrain" -- I have written many haiku on various birds -- I give this poem five tweets. Thank you, CBAT.
Haiku-guy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Thank you, you make me laugh.
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To CBAT:
I like to make people smile. Poets, even vile versifiers like me, are, or should be, entertainers, at some level. Also, to me words and languages are inherently funny, in different ways.
Haiku-guy