Miscellaneous Poems - vol 3
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Comment from kiwijenny
I'm going to the Shaky Isles next week. From Georgia USA
I like your bucket list...I think it would be great to get your book form a library...me too I'd like that
God bless
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
I'm going to the Shaky Isles next week. From Georgia USA
I like your bucket list...I think it would be great to get your book form a library...me too I'd like that
God bless
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reviewing my poem Jenny - I take it you are originally from NZ? If so, howdy neighbour :)
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Yes I am a kiwi through and through though my dad is English my husband is American my kids are dual citizens and my grandson was born in Scotland...what state do I live in? Confused
Comment from Nosha17
I think we all decide not to travel anymore, then the attraction is too strong. I guess, you live in New Zealand, but I note your loved one comes from England. I lived in USA for over 20 years, but the draw to come back home was irresistible. I liked your musings on your list of things still to do. Excellent rhyming and imagery. Just one thing, hope you don't mind my suggestion. In verse 3, line 2, the word 'writ' is grammatically incorrect, it should be written. You could get round that: penned by me, then line 3, write a book. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
I think we all decide not to travel anymore, then the attraction is too strong. I guess, you live in New Zealand, but I note your loved one comes from England. I lived in USA for over 20 years, but the draw to come back home was irresistible. I liked your musings on your list of things still to do. Excellent rhyming and imagery. Just one thing, hope you don't mind my suggestion. In verse 3, line 2, the word 'writ' is grammatically incorrect, it should be written. You could get round that: penned by me, then line 3, write a book. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Hi :) I live in Australia. My partner was born in England, but has lived here for the past 40+ years - she left the UK when she was nine. I never mind constructive suggestions for improvement. Your point about writ is well taken - I'm aware I'm taking a bit of a liberty there. I think your idea is definitely more "correct" - I just prefer the sound of the other. I will certainly give it thought - and thank you for the suggestion. Thank you too for your kind comments. Craig
Comment from Eric1
Hi CD Richards, well I guess we all have a bucket list, but not everyone can put it into superb rhyme like this my friend, good flow and rhythm, great use of description.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
Hi CD Richards, well I guess we all have a bucket list, but not everyone can put it into superb rhyme like this my friend, good flow and rhythm, great use of description.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Well, I didn't, really, until a writing prompt said it was my job to create one! But now I'm glad that I did. Thanks, Eric, for your very kind review. Craig.
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You are most welcome my friend
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
I love your bucket list and much of what you write would go on mine, especially stanza 3 - and I think most of the people on FS would agree. I like the humour in your penultimate stanza - the age old 'dig' at the mother-in-law. Well written, interesting read. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
I love your bucket list and much of what you write would go on mine, especially stanza 3 - and I think most of the people on FS would agree. I like the humour in your penultimate stanza - the age old 'dig' at the mother-in-law. Well written, interesting read. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Dorothy, for your lovely review. I actually get on really well with both the in-laws, but they still wouldn't be invited! Glad you enjoyed. Craig.
Comment from Amy Greta
I love your poem! When I first looked at the picture, I thought it was going to be a horrifying trip back to a cattle car during the Holocaust, but I was pleasantly surprised that it meant bucket list! Your ideas are fun and genuine, and romantic, with "your girl". I especially like the trek to England without the in-laws (which is telling in itself). Great light-hearted fun poem to read!
~Amy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
I love your poem! When I first looked at the picture, I thought it was going to be a horrifying trip back to a cattle car during the Holocaust, but I was pleasantly surprised that it meant bucket list! Your ideas are fun and genuine, and romantic, with "your girl". I especially like the trek to England without the in-laws (which is telling in itself). Great light-hearted fun poem to read!
~Amy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Amy, for your lovely review - it was a pleasure to read. I'm glad you got some enjoyment out of my poem. All the best, Craig.
Comment from petalangela
There may yet be time for you to cover
One of these things but not the another
I hope the bucket has not firmed a hole
Because then some things away will roll
Love your girl for she is real and is now
Who needs their in laws in life anyhow
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
There may yet be time for you to cover
One of these things but not the another
I hope the bucket has not firmed a hole
Because then some things away will roll
Love your girl for she is real and is now
Who needs their in laws in life anyhow
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Actually, I quite like my in-laws - but they still wouldn't be invited. Thanks for a funny review :-)
Comment from DreamtwithClarity
I like what you've put on your list, it is something I could emulate and shape into my own fate. Your words are structured great and your state seems to be of good spirits. You've rhymed, primed your very eyes to see what you've defined as a writ of ambition and through that you've shined. I like what goes on in your mind as you bucket your desires and to me they are so very fine. - D.O.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
I like what you've put on your list, it is something I could emulate and shape into my own fate. Your words are structured great and your state seems to be of good spirits. You've rhymed, primed your very eyes to see what you've defined as a writ of ambition and through that you've shined. I like what goes on in your mind as you bucket your desires and to me they are so very fine. - D.O.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, D.O., for your very nice comments. I try to make my mind a happy place -- mostly, but not always, it is. Glad you enjoyed my poem. Craig.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your poem. Good rhythm and even flow. Excellent word choice to enhance the theme. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
I enjoyed reading your poem. Good rhythm and even flow. Excellent word choice to enhance the theme. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Gypsy Blue Rose, for your very kind words. Glad you liked my poem :-)
Craig
Comment from CMac2
What a gorgeous poem. Love the rhyme and content. I understand Shaky Isles as I am from New Zealand but now living in Brisbane Aus. If you have not been to NZ, I can certainly recommend a visit. A lovely read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
What a gorgeous poem. Love the rhyme and content. I understand Shaky Isles as I am from New Zealand but now living in Brisbane Aus. If you have not been to NZ, I can certainly recommend a visit. A lovely read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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NZ is definitely top of my list! Nice to meet a fellow antipodean here - I know there are a few of us. Thanks for liking my poem, too :-)
Craig
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello CD Richards
Now here is a real good rhyming poem about your bucket list
Just let me ask ( seeing your bucket) in the picture is it big enough to hold your treasured liist
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
Hello CD Richards
Now here is a real good rhyming poem about your bucket list
Just let me ask ( seeing your bucket) in the picture is it big enough to hold your treasured liist
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Haha ... maybe I could adapt the line from Jaws - instead of "We need a bigger boat", we could have "We need a bigger bucket"!
Thanks, Gert, for stopping by to review my poem, much appreciated :-)
Craig
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Smiles you are welcome CD