Sundowns
Cradling Grandson Memory38 total reviews
Comment from amanda98653
This is a beautiful poem, Nancy. Very sad too.
The repetition of the word "no" in "No reversals in time, no resurrections--no miracles. Can't go back to what it was--no fairy tales. " is extremely effective in conveying a voice of despair.
These lines are so beautiful and heartbreaking:
"Grandma, be still...
slow down, sniff in these sunsets
And you will find me"
Definitely exceptional
Amanda
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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This is a beautiful poem, Nancy. Very sad too.
The repetition of the word "no" in "No reversals in time, no resurrections--no miracles. Can't go back to what it was--no fairy tales. " is extremely effective in conveying a voice of despair.
These lines are so beautiful and heartbreaking:
"Grandma, be still...
slow down, sniff in these sunsets
And you will find me"
Definitely exceptional
Amanda
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you dear woman-child. Amazing perceptions for a 18-year old. Keep on writing.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Amada. I don't often review work that only pays two cents but in your case, the read was worth it and you are such a good fan. I love the feel of this poem..like:
"And a swift sound comes straight into my inner ear--
The one linking my heart to the throbbing in my throat
As I hear a whisper in his unique childlike, grown-up voice:
"Grandma, be still..."
Great writing. Bob
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Hi, Amada. I don't often review work that only pays two cents but in your case, the read was worth it and you are such a good fan. I love the feel of this poem..like:
"And a swift sound comes straight into my inner ear--
The one linking my heart to the throbbing in my throat
As I hear a whisper in his unique childlike, grown-up voice:
"Grandma, be still..."
Great writing. Bob
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work, great it was worthy. :-)
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I am hoping you took my remarks as they were intended, amada. It's simply a fact...there is generally no way a person on here can accumulate member dollars reviewing 2 cent postings. I hope you were not insulted?? Worthy? I did not mean it that way at all. Blessings, Bob
Comment from petalangela
No one can relate fully to your grief my twin grandsons died after two weeks. I often think of them growing up. They would be 21 this year.
My heart reaches out to you and I know the sorrow
Your poem is beautiful it has a sad acceptance of yesteryear of losing a grandson you heldcdearb
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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No one can relate fully to your grief my twin grandsons died after two weeks. I often think of them growing up. They would be 21 this year.
My heart reaches out to you and I know the sorrow
Your poem is beautiful it has a sad acceptance of yesteryear of losing a grandson you heldcdearb
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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My thoughts and prayers are with you. Those grandsons, two angels now, they guard over you. Just like my grandson. Hugs.
Comment from honeytree
I loved the art work here very much
The words are very true and powerful ones
About life and memory.
Our lives can be up and down, how do we cope?
We can be happy and sad we can love give or hate
Our lives do come to an end.
Honey tree
I have no six left
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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I loved the art work here very much
The words are very true and powerful ones
About life and memory.
Our lives can be up and down, how do we cope?
We can be happy and sad we can love give or hate
Our lives do come to an end.
Honey tree
I have no six left
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your comments and for the virtual six.
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Great words
Annie
Comment from Bryana
My dear friend,
You've written a beautiful poem, rather sad
but I understand. I love these lines...
My porch, a perfect site to guard memories.
as fresh radiance filters from a ray of slow sunshine.
Hugs
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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My dear friend,
You've written a beautiful poem, rather sad
but I understand. I love these lines...
My porch, a perfect site to guard memories.
as fresh radiance filters from a ray of slow sunshine.
Hugs
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thank you, you know.
Comment from CMac2
An enjoyable read although sorrowful. I loved your words 'breathing in at sundown'. Almost like breathing in memories at the end of the day. Beautifully written and an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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An enjoyable read although sorrowful. I loved your words 'breathing in at sundown'. Almost like breathing in memories at the end of the day. Beautifully written and an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from Linda Kay
I like the imagery of sundown being a time to pull in these memories and savor them. It is sort of counterpoint to the traditional image of the opposite time- sunrise representing a new start and possibilities each day. At sundown, instead you are reflecting and guarding memories.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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I like the imagery of sundown being a time to pull in these memories and savor them. It is sort of counterpoint to the traditional image of the opposite time- sunrise representing a new start and possibilities each day. At sundown, instead you are reflecting and guarding memories.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from Glasstruth
We can't go back, but only learn and enjoy from where we were. Memories are special. Just imagine life without it. Wouldn't be worth it. Like how the sun represents time like a clock, instead of ticking, it rises and goes down. Nice alliteration of S words in "slow down, sniff in these sunsets" Great job! Les
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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We can't go back, but only learn and enjoy from where we were. Memories are special. Just imagine life without it. Wouldn't be worth it. Like how the sun represents time like a clock, instead of ticking, it rises and goes down. Nice alliteration of S words in "slow down, sniff in these sunsets" Great job! Les
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from dmt1967
I like the way this poem ends and how the poet builds up to it. The yellow background makes the poem stand out, and the picture suits the tone of the poem very well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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I like the way this poem ends and how the poet builds up to it. The yellow background makes the poem stand out, and the picture suits the tone of the poem very well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from TAB_that's me
oh my, you lost your grandson? how sad. I like your poem and how you see him in the sunsets - breathing him in:)
teresa
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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oh my, you lost your grandson? how sad. I like your poem and how you see him in the sunsets - breathing him in:)
teresa
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you Teresa for for reading and feeling my words.