Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Great 5-7-5 that packs a punch. Your word play makes it hilarious. Love the windbreakers and chilly walkers. We recently attended a retirement bbq where one of the food offerings was a crockpot of homemade beans. The discussion of windbreakers was openly shared. They would have loved this little poem :)

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thanks for sharing your story, Joy. That could have resulted in a record breaking song. LOL

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Perfect poetic form about a musical food. Your words paint a clear picture of people consuming beans and the end result(no pun intended). Your poem is witty and true to life.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015

End result. Good one, Elaine.

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

Ha ha. This is really funny. Love the play on words in the second line. The satori is hilarious. You really come up with some good ones. I needed a good laugh to end my day. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015

I like to end my day with a giggle or two, certainly not with a musical toot. LOL

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

outdoor food vendor
sells beans to chilly walkers
wanting windbreakers

LOL! This is terrific. Windbreakers... LOL! Bravo. No one does these punaikus like you. :)

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015

Thanks, Phyllis. My computer played games last nights, kept knocking off for a nano second, so I decided someone up there was trying to tell me something!

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Hahahahaha! G'day Shari, that's a big change of pace to the book. I used to hate these little pieces but funny ones like this have swung my mind in their direction, although I still can't write them. Great job, very witty. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015

Thanks, Fez. All it takes is a funny expression and then work up to it.

Comment from fairy77

Excellent

This is funny and I can relate to it LOL! Liked windbreakers and the pick is perfect. Your senryus are priceless and I had a good chuckle!Nice job Shari:)beth fairy77

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015

Thanks, beth. Seems you're off and on again.

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Haha!! Great senryu humor, Shari. Reminds me of the old saying "beans beans musical fruit, the more you eat the more you toot!" 8-)

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015

Yep, my father taught me that much to Mom's annoyance.

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello Spitfire, A fun 5-7-5 poem and written with a bit of senryu humor. Of note:

wanting windbreakers
(and nose plugs too - lol.)

And so ... sharing my afterthoughts:

windbreaker surges
after chili con carne
stuffy nose wanted

(SF, I couldn't help myself ... had to respond. Lol.)

And the motto of the story:

Stay away from chili beans.

Very good. You made me laugh. Keep the blue waters flowing. Latebloomer

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015

Hey, it's a real compliment when my poem inspires the creativity of others. Thanks, LB.

Comment from walbc

Excellent

Exceptionally clever 5-7-5, Shari. The imagery is amazing considering it is only three lines. Love your alliteration at the end. Great artwork. Well done.
Warm regards, Wendy.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015

Thanks, Wendy. :-)

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

How hysterical. 'wanting windbreakers' !!! What a wonderfully colorful alliteration. You never cease to amaze me with your clever one liners.
What comes to mind is the drum roll and then the cymbal. Old vaudeville. Any comedian would have loved this for a quick walk on, get a laugh, and walk off the stage.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015

And that laugh would cause windbreakers too. LOL