Comment from Liilia

Excellent

I like how you used the idea of the structure of this type of poem as the subject. It looks good and sounds good and is funny, too. Thank you for sharing and for making that effort to deal with the requirements (something I'm not able to do at this point :). And thanks very much for using my drawing to illustrate.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015

Thank you Liila your drawing was lovely and I thought it complemented my poem. Getting used to all the different styles of writing is fun and Fan Art have some lovely choices. I like your work also. Thanks for your review, rating and comments Cheers Christine

Comment from CeciliaLynne

Excellent

Your rictameter poetry fulfills the meter requirements. You have presented your thoughts clearly. Great art selection to compliment your written word.
When writing poetry it has been said that poets have poetic license to use their own grammatical styles and wording as inspire and I am not suggesting a need for any change unless inspired. Just another word for thought, for your 4th. Iine ending in (up more), could also work with (much more). Either way it pens out meaning, more words. Well done.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015

Thanks CeciliaLynne for reading my first time rictameter and giving me your thoughts and feedback. As I am quite new to this site and styles of poetry I am happy to learn from the experts (Also great to meet people and like minded as well) appreciate your time, rating and comments Cheers Christine😊

reply by CeciliaLynne on 09-Jun-2015

Glad to have you aboard the Fanstory ship. Smooth sailing wish for you. It has been a great learning and rewarding experience. Inspiration and encouragement by reading and hearing from others is priceless. Look forward to reviewing more of your gifted work. All the best.

reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015

Thanks You

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

How very clever to write a poem about writing a poem. It worked well. The poem is lovely and cute, and seems to fulfill the requirement of the form. Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015

Thank you davisr just seem to come out that way I had fun writing this and first attempt so I appreciate your time to read and review thanks again Cheers Christine😀

reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 09-Jun-2015

It was cute!

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

That's sort of what I am thinking
when I try to do 'forms"
I start counting and
stop thinking about
what I'm saying
and soon i'm
just putting
words in
and then
nothing
see?
lol

this made me smile. And it's just as good as the others, which really made me smile.
Cat

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015

Thanks Cat I had fun writing that, and yes there were some great ones too and I,m honoured to think you thought mine was as good .Cheers Christine

Comment from danpald

Excellent

Well the poem meets the test
That comes to form from a poet's wish
To follow the rules of the type
A poem that meets all just right

I need to be free in my write
To let the heart flow without constraints
Never worry about the rhyme
Nor the syllables are right

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015

Thank you danpald for your clever reply and for reading my poem, yes I am just getting my head around syllable, requirements and learning about all the different styles of poetry writing. Enjoying this site and everyone who corresponds with me, having a lot of fun. Appreciate your commentsCheers Christine😀

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This rictameter, GOING UP / GOING DOWN, uses up a lot of syllables to say that it has nothing to say and fifty syllables in which to not say it. This was the message I received.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks Bill Schott for your review and summary which sums it up well thanks for you insightful view and great rating Cheers Christine😊

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Welcome to the challenge! That's what FS poets do, write and rewrite and enter
the contests! I know that you are being honest with so many words to write.
Good humor of the up and down. Keep writing! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Hi flylikeaneagle ,yes this is it I suppose getting a little hooked on the challenges , but enjoying them anyway, I try to write honestly and sometimes the words just appear. Thanks for your time and review it is appreciated Cheers Christine

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a spot on line and syllable count. I thoroughly enjoyed your approach as you walk the reader through the creation process in a lyrically graceful manner. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thank you Mystic Angel 7777 . I tried hard to meet all requirements and enjoyed the challenge. It is interesting I think of what you will come up with when a subject is posed and so gad you though it worthy . Thanks for your good wishes. Cheers Christine😀

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Poet,

I think you did a good job in writing your first Rictameter poem. I've read it several times and I think the line that is supposed to have 10 syllables only has 9 of them. Oops I looked up the word poem which I thought had one syllable and see that it has two. The line is perfect!

MizKat

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thank you MizKat I tried to meet the brief quite a challenge but had a bit of fun trying glad you had a read and appreciate your review and comments Cheers Christine

reply by MizKat on 06-Jun-2015

I think you did a very good job in writing it.

reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thank you 😀

reply by MizKat on 06-Jun-2015

You're very welcome.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Good pairing of poem and artwork to get the message you're trying to convey home. The girl in your accompanying artwork certainly looks reflective, and hard at work, purely from a mental standpoint, of course. But let's face it, mental work can be just as taxing on our stamina as physical work can be at times.

Well done. Good luck in the contest with this entry. ~Dean

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks Dean for you review and good wishes for the contest. Yes getting the old brain box working can be challenging but I am having a go at styles I have never done before, so it's a learning curve for me but great fun and am enjoying all the contacts with FanStory writers. Thanks for your support Cheers Christine😀

reply by Dean Kuch on 06-Jun-2015

My pleasure, Christine. Anytime...
~Dean