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Comment from meggie13
Your husband is traveling too much and you are beginning to wonder what is keeping him away from home. It's time for you to have a serious conversation with him. This is very unusual if he loves you , he's got to miss you. In your poem I can sense you love and miss him . Like you say when he realizes it may be too late.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Your husband is traveling too much and you are beginning to wonder what is keeping him away from home. It's time for you to have a serious conversation with him. This is very unusual if he loves you , he's got to miss you. In your poem I can sense you love and miss him . Like you say when he realizes it may be too late.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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The wife has been patient as he travels around, but now takes matters into her own hands and won't wait any more, thanks for the review,cheers j
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You are welcome. Cheers!
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You are welcome. Cheers!
Comment from bayforesthimankush
It is a poem of telling a wife's feeling for her husband travelling worldwide. She tells about their lovely days together. It may be too late to love each other again as they did when her husband left.
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It is a poem of telling a wife's feeling for her husband travelling worldwide. She tells about their lovely days together. It may be too late to love each other again as they did when her husband left.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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This patient wife has had enough, and is no longer waiting for him. Thanks for the review, cheers j
Comment from 4hisglory
I guess I would ask why he didn't take his wife with him. My husband and I hate to be apart.
Good entry for the contest. Your word choses are very good. Blessings, LaVonne
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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I guess I would ask why he didn't take his wife with him. My husband and I hate to be apart.
Good entry for the contest. Your word choses are very good. Blessings, LaVonne
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for the review, she is tired of waiting while he travels around, maybe mid life crisis? and won't wait for him any more,cheers j
Comment from reconciled
HI Jude, some times it is just to late...and you should have loved what was there in front of you...so very well written...and a perfect picture
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HI Jude, some times it is just to late...and you should have loved what was there in front of you...so very well written...and a perfect picture
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for the encouraging review, yes sometimes we look for things that have always been there at home. She was patient but has had enough, cheers j
Comment from Justin Chopin
He surely is a gypsy if he's able to travel from China, and Ghana and Rome . I enjoyed the story you have in this piece of a wife being so irate at her husband for caring more about exploring the world than he does about her. Great job with the piece loved the emotions the narrative voice was great. My only suggestion for you would be to give me a reason why the husband is traveling so much.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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He surely is a gypsy if he's able to travel from China, and Ghana and Rome . I enjoyed the story you have in this piece of a wife being so irate at her husband for caring more about exploring the world than he does about her. Great job with the piece loved the emotions the narrative voice was great. My only suggestion for you would be to give me a reason why the husband is traveling so much.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Justin, he is a gypsy, his patient wife is not so much irate, but frustrated. I wanted the last line to jar and stop the flow, thank you for the insightful review. I appreciate your thoughts, cheers j
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You're welcome Jude.
Comment from rspoet
You've written a very nice poem
The rhymes are soft and exact
Three excellent questions that lead to the heart of the poem
Great photograph to poem match that draws the reader in
Excellent line, "to find what you had when you left"
Slight possible change in last question. "Do you mind?" just for the sound
Either way, an excellent poem
Well done.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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You've written a very nice poem
The rhymes are soft and exact
Three excellent questions that lead to the heart of the poem
Great photograph to poem match that draws the reader in
Excellent line, "to find what you had when you left"
Slight possible change in last question. "Do you mind?" just for the sound
Either way, an excellent poem
Well done.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for your concise and helpful review. I agree with the, do you mind? line I wanted the last line to jar the reader, this patient wife has had enough. I will reread and find a smoother ending, thanks rspoet, cheers j
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If you prefer the original line for a more jarring effect, I would leave it just as it is. It is excellent
Comment from Lesley Collier
A very touching poem of a wife missing her gypsy of a husband who travels the world until she decides that instead of going through the pain of not knowing whether he thinks of her or coming home she will be long gone in search of a better life as he will have returned too late. Nicely rhymed and well expressed!
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A very touching poem of a wife missing her gypsy of a husband who travels the world until she decides that instead of going through the pain of not knowing whether he thinks of her or coming home she will be long gone in search of a better life as he will have returned too late. Nicely rhymed and well expressed!
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for the insightful review Lesley. Sometimes absence does not make the heart grow fonder, cheers judester
