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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from papa55mike
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When we do join our voices in a song of hope, fear has no choice but to leave. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Yeah. You have a great day too. Your statement conveys to me a warm heart. Glad nothing in this particular read: angered you. Thanking you for that generous rate. And kind words
Comment from Ice Traigh
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For the life of me, I could not figure out the rhythm to this poem. Maybe it's avantgarde. I think it's about a family of dancing, singing birds. Only reason I don't give this 2 stars is because I recognize some talent and intelligence going on here. Maybe I'm missing the point, or maybe the author tried a bit too hard to go artistic. Either way, something was missed.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
    Another effort, that failed apparently. Maybe, soon get lucky and do it right: making a more appealing and comprehensive read for my reader. Again, thanking you for this generous rate despite.
Comment from writeapoem
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God created animals for man. I enjoyed your expressions and professions how animals can be loved who gave them to man from above. All the best for loving God' creatures.

 Comment Written 30-May-2016


reply by the author on 30-May-2016
    Yeah, the little guys need a voice and friend. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed captivating statement.
Comment from artisart4u
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I like your poem about how you have over the years got to know animal behavior.

I like how one line rolls into the next and most of all the start of each sentence
is explained in the stanza. Like "They give sight to blindness ..."

Good luck with your poem.

 Comment Written 30-May-2016


reply by the author on 30-May-2016
    Learnt features I obtained from FS reviews. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts about this write.
Comment from rashi kumar
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I will tell you the one thing I loved the most about your poem- its music.
unto the utmost: high heaven, chorusing love. Shelter and my fortress, held of harmony, torn soul's rim... too many. Its not annotation/connotation everywhere, its word music. The way you have put together them in a sentence- loved it.
Pleasure to read, it is indeed a song

 Comment Written 23-May-2016


reply by the author on 24-May-2016
    Wonderful feelings expressed about this write. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements of inspirations.
Comment from way2gokevs
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A six for effort on a well constructed and flowing free verse poem.
Very in-depth showed a maturity of a life lived well and with a song.

Enjoyed the read, thanks for sharing.
Cheers.
Kev.

 Comment Written 23-May-2016


reply by the author on 24-May-2016
    Love your comment, I find myself touched by the things not expressed: totally captivated by said thoughts. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
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Excellent story, great writing skills.You aroused my interest in the way you expressed yourself in this great piece of work .Great Job

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 01-May-2016
    Glad these thoughts were found pleasing to you. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE
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Hi, again busy writer. Busy journeyer!
I feel this is an excellent opening:

Ideals presented in aims to have hope, them chorusing love, your songs of prayers; themes having dreams unto the utmost: high heavens.

Pitch kindness within my empty shell

And:

Planners of courses they are to be, a glow assured of achievement, I'm out of sadness; guidance has its brightness: its shine as sun.
Shelter and a fortress they are to me, them as pals to walk with me in life; I'm structured in knowledge: our views held of harmony.

A wonderful start for a new day! I hope the sun continues to warm and bless you as your journey unfolds new treasure on the Way. Happy travelling, Maureen*&*

 Comment Written 01-May-2016


reply by the author on 02-May-2016
    See some of my blindness has given some light. Appreciate your input, good, bad.or ugly: I try to accept my pits. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
reply by A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE on 04-May-2016
    Extra stars for such great work, especially if challenged with blindness, blessings, Maureen*&*
Comment from Ricky1024
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a song was a very well written piece of artwork by 2Pac it causes and clauses no human being on Earth is rich in objective content as well as object of contents eBay imagery Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
    Glad this write caught some interests. Thanking you for generous rate and comforting thoughts.
Comment from foxangie123
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I think you have won this contest with this amazing write and the art you chose to go with it. Wow this is third of yours today. You have gotten every number. Great stuff

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
    Exactly, stuff. Hope to few them from flows, FS has given me a good start. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
reply by foxangie123 on 22-Mar-2016
    If you need anything I'm here as is FS. Keep being great.