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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from misscookie
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I found this to be a very interesting read
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
I may be wrong but this is a very sad poem about the life of nature in the woods.
Let me know if I'm wrong please
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Everyday learning in the rural regions, especially for young who don't drive and must walk. Believe it or not not to many walking to get bites. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
reply by misscookie on 14-Jun-2016
    Your very welcome, have a blessed day.
    Cookie
Comment from Slythytove2
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I'm not quite sure how to go about reviewing this. It has a certain cohesion in that it's all about scary, but lacks a central meaning or moral. It needs something to give it all purpose. At present it is a bunching of ideas and fragments of thoughts that don't appear to be going anywhere outside the poem. Its a style I'm not familiar with though I work in free verse. I'm not sure what to say, but something is missing.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
reply by Slythytove2 on 14-Jun-2016
    There you go...
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
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TPAC, I know there is a great poem in here somewhere, but due to our language barrier, it was difficult (to say the least) trying to interpret it fully. Please, take the time to edit and message me and I will most definitely read again and re-rate! There is so much here to be saved!!! Great effort and good imagery in what I could interpret! God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    I will try to relate topic better. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Bill Schott
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I am beginning to tune into the layout of these poems of yours. Trying to read them as a whole is not going to ever work. I now read everything in blasts of expression and find many gems hidden in the unconnected lines.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Yeah my pits bring my efforts down. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from TAB_that's me
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It sounds like a very scary thing. Your English grammar needs some work but I could get the gist of this even with the language barrier.

teresa

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    I will try to do my impossible write this correct or consider alternative in accomplishing Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from Lisa Deverick
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Usually I read the authors notes first- but I did not this time. As I read this, I was imagining an elderly person with dementia that had wandered off... but your wooded scenario is good also! haha well done.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Unfortunately bad language takes away from this write. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
Comment from sage17611
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I sense the fear in your very descriptive write, I can only imagine walking in the dark forest alone at night. My heart would beat out of my chest, just imagining what is lurking around me. However, I will suggest that you edit your text, I found several grammatical errors that take away from the read. If you edit I will reread and change my rating. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Don't worry about changing your views. I thank you for this statement and welcomed views.
Comment from Ulla
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I am so sorry to give you a three star, but your poem needs a lot of working over for language and grammar. English is not my first language either, but I'm working very hard at getting it right. My problem in helping you is that I hardly understand your words. I am so sorry. I do understand that you have a lot to say in your poems, and I do admire your effort. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Don't be sorrow and don't feel low about your own lacks in expressions. Thanking you for treasured rate and warm thoughts.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
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I read this twice to be sure my interpretation and understanding was on point. This is voluminous in descriptive comment and evoked fear in me as I imagined walking through a dense forest alone at night, leaving the reader to think the voice is of someone with draconian or werewolf tendencies. Excellent read.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Glad the rush of excitement was at least conveyed in this write. I will try to expose it better through revisions. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statement.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I can promise you I would not be walking around at night. Maybe if I did, I would come up with a wonderful poem, but I doubt it. I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Pits of grammar takes from this write, yet please all factors weren't flaws. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.