Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Grateful"Dawn of Chaos
26 total reviews
Comment from Mel E. Furnish
Very good flow and word choice.
Also, I find the ending really interested how you used a fly and a spider and its web the fly gets caught up in. Very good, excellent work! Keep it up!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Very good flow and word choice.
Also, I find the ending really interested how you used a fly and a spider and its web the fly gets caught up in. Very good, excellent work! Keep it up!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Glad aspects in this write was seen creative by your perception. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.
Comment from Ronni
That what we get what we wish for or are so preoccupied with...good or bad
has been physically and psychologically been proven to happen. Yet most
people blame or curse someone else, or circumstance for their less than
desired life or expectations. Seldom look within themselves and aware
they are bringing about exactly what they are thinking and feeling most
of the time, and not ever aware or grateful for the good and blessings
in their lives. Never perfect, yet it only becomes better with the more
open and realistic attitude.
Your poem is an intellectual gem and so right on in your theme
of good or bad, and direly needed enlightenment. Do keep on writing please!
Thanks for sharing,
Best wishes, Ronni
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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That what we get what we wish for or are so preoccupied with...good or bad
has been physically and psychologically been proven to happen. Yet most
people blame or curse someone else, or circumstance for their less than
desired life or expectations. Seldom look within themselves and aware
they are bringing about exactly what they are thinking and feeling most
of the time, and not ever aware or grateful for the good and blessings
in their lives. Never perfect, yet it only becomes better with the more
open and realistic attitude.
Your poem is an intellectual gem and so right on in your theme
of good or bad, and direly needed enlightenment. Do keep on writing please!
Thanks for sharing,
Best wishes, Ronni
Comment Written 23-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Glad this write ranged your chain. I like your perception of views presented in this review. Great inspiring hopes of encouragement to me. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
TPAC forgive me please perhaps I'm not opened minded enough to grasp the total idea here, I do love your emphasis in the first 4 paragraphs but as I read further I get disconnected. You have strong phrases and they are worded very well but I somewhat get lost down the line.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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TPAC forgive me please perhaps I'm not opened minded enough to grasp the total idea here, I do love your emphasis in the first 4 paragraphs but as I read further I get disconnected. You have strong phrases and they are worded very well but I somewhat get lost down the line.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Most my writes do suffer pits, why I constantly do revision to accomplish a better expression of my views. Thanks to given comments as your, I'm given a consideration. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
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Again perhaps my mind is not yet open enough to trasp the total message, but what i understood I loved it!
Comment from joycetreasures
Excellent title. I like your free-flowing poem.
1st paragraph - Caring parents, things are going well, but thinking about leaving home.
2nd paragraph- Help is needed from many directions. The line, "Love in desires for from all direction" should have a "s" on direction. Nice line.
3rd paragraph - Feeling the anxiety to leave. Getting to comfort with all that honey from the parents.
4th paragraph - Anxious about being on your own
5th paragraph - Whatever it's going to take, you will push yourself to leave that comfortable home, right?
6th paragraph - In the end, life brings on it's realities. And, maybe you should have stayed where you were.
Cool poem. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Excellent title. I like your free-flowing poem.
1st paragraph - Caring parents, things are going well, but thinking about leaving home.
2nd paragraph- Help is needed from many directions. The line, "Love in desires for from all direction" should have a "s" on direction. Nice line.
3rd paragraph - Feeling the anxiety to leave. Getting to comfort with all that honey from the parents.
4th paragraph - Anxious about being on your own
5th paragraph - Whatever it's going to take, you will push yourself to leave that comfortable home, right?
6th paragraph - In the end, life brings on it's realities. And, maybe you should have stayed where you were.
Cool poem. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 22-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Good shout. I will add that s. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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You are so welcome.
Comment from Gloria ....
The artwork looks like a visual representation of schizophrenia. The severe separation of sharp lines, the eyes above, centre and below.
TPAC this is really incredibly good. Your opening line says so much, plenty of laughs among caring eyes. Yet the emptiness persists and still the spider's web catches the prisoner.
There is much to consider in this uneasy, but quite beautiful poem. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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The artwork looks like a visual representation of schizophrenia. The severe separation of sharp lines, the eyes above, centre and below.
TPAC this is really incredibly good. Your opening line says so much, plenty of laughs among caring eyes. Yet the emptiness persists and still the spider's web catches the prisoner.
There is much to consider in this uneasy, but quite beautiful poem. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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I like your perception of these statements, honest uplifting aspects that illustrate your charm about life. Glad to meet you. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought.
Comment from Kathy Allmon
I love this idea. The artwork you picked matched it perfectly. What was your process? Did you have it written first or did you choose the artwork first? I do both so was just curious.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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I love this idea. The artwork you picked matched it perfectly. What was your process? Did you have it written first or did you choose the artwork first? I do both so was just curious.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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Most these writes were stated as teenager, I'm 63 now. I guess just lucky to find matching art. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from The kurlman
TPAC, I think I know where you are coming from but feel the regular person reading this poem would think as I do and not understand it. I not only stumbled over the lines but had to read them over and over and still was lost. I am sorry, I had a hard time with it. The kurlman
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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TPAC, I think I know where you are coming from but feel the regular person reading this poem would think as I do and not understand it. I not only stumbled over the lines but had to read them over and over and still was lost. I am sorry, I had a hard time with it. The kurlman
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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I do suffer many pits in my write, why I'm here at FS. Thanks to reviews like your, I reach deep an apply myself in revisions. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
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You are most welcome, keep writing. The kurlman
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks good or bad, whatever the time, be grateful to God for opportunities offered; well said, well done. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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This speaks good or bad, whatever the time, be grateful to God for opportunities offered; well said, well done. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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A crossroad in life, decisions determined to prevail living fates. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Harry Smith
The picture selection is just outstanding and the poem is very well written and I love it so much I read it twice. I really like your writing and will be back to read more.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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The picture selection is just outstanding and the poem is very well written and I love it so much I read it twice. I really like your writing and will be back to read more.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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At least someone does, hoping to maintain those given expectations in future writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
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You are welcome
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter by TPAC was well written rich and seeing as well as imagery it flowed well and I enjoyed that as I found a grammar issues the objective content click well with object of content theme and imagery script measures line perfectly thanks for this and Happy Valentine's Day dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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This chapter by TPAC was well written rich and seeing as well as imagery it flowed well and I enjoyed that as I found a grammar issues the objective content click well with object of content theme and imagery script measures line perfectly thanks for this and Happy Valentine's Day dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Happy love fest to you, too. Glad aspects of this write was pleasing. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching words.