White Collar to No Collar
100 word flash fiction5 total reviews
Comment from Judy Couch
Sounds like a great retirement job. Singing would be a lot more fun than working an 8 to 5 job. You presented the plot well and built questions in my mind until the end.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Sounds like a great retirement job. Singing would be a lot more fun than working an 8 to 5 job. You presented the plot well and built questions in my mind until the end.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comment on my 100 word story. F _
Comment from Pen of Fire
How great it is to be able to pursue one's dreams before life in over. This was written very well and in its own way brings hope to many dreamers. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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How great it is to be able to pursue one's dreams before life in over. This was written very well and in its own way brings hope to many dreamers. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comment on my 100 word story. F _
Comment from Liilia
This story says it all. How many of us wish we could be brave enough to do the same - follow our dreams? The manner of telling the tale is straightforward and to the point. Each word and sentence moves what is going on in logical sequence. The character comes on loud and clear and I can just imagine his expression as he drives past the building where he worked for 20 years, but his mind was already on the music - his true dream. Thanks for this moving story and also for using my painting to illustrate.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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This story says it all. How many of us wish we could be brave enough to do the same - follow our dreams? The manner of telling the tale is straightforward and to the point. Each word and sentence moves what is going on in logical sequence. The character comes on loud and clear and I can just imagine his expression as he drives past the building where he worked for 20 years, but his mind was already on the music - his true dream. Thanks for this moving story and also for using my painting to illustrate.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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The rating and comments are appreciated. Thank you F_
Comment from Nosha17
You have captured the complete story for your piece of flash fiction in the required space well. Well narrated and it flowed well. I thought it ended a bit abruptly. You could use the line: It was time for him to follow his dreams as the last line, maybe, just a suggestion. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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You have captured the complete story for your piece of flash fiction in the required space well. Well narrated and it flowed well. I thought it ended a bit abruptly. You could use the line: It was time for him to follow his dreams as the last line, maybe, just a suggestion. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comment on my 100 word story. F _
Comment from TAB_that's me
I think everyone should follow their dream if they can afford to:) I like your flash fiction piece and hope you do well in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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I think everyone should follow their dream if they can afford to:) I like your flash fiction piece and hope you do well in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review and comment on my 100 word story. F _