Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

I should never read your work so late at night, Dean. Now I'll be up for a while. That last line clenched the deal. You have an excellent narrative voice. The story starts out so unthreatening, but the you know how to turn the ordinary elements into a chilling scene.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015

Ha-ha, you'd think you would have leaned by now, Debi, heh-heh...

In all seriousness, thanks very much for your review. I truly appreciate it. :} ~Dean

Comment from penneylane

Excellent

I'll start with that I love the intro. so creepy. I'll follow it with the last line is completely chilling. And I'll end it with....is there going to be more? I want more.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

I've been considering it, Elynn, but this was really intended as a stand alone flash fiction story.
Thanks so much for taking the time to read it and offer your opinions. I appreciate that. ~Dean

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

The music didn't play, Deano.
Still, a suicide is often dramatic reading, even without music. '' Don't fear the reaper'' by Blue Oyster cult is one of my favorite tracks, and what many do not know, it surrounds the area of suicide though to listen to it could seem otherwise.
Best wishes.
By the way, congratulations on your POM win, I have been off site a little.
RG

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Thank you very much, Roy, for both taking the time to read and respond to my story and for your congratulatory remarks as well. It's good to have you back, my friend.

Have a very Happy Easter. ~Dean

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Dean. Great to see my grin got a mention in one of your fantastic stories mate LOL. This is another piece of horror art in the form of a story and as always I enjoyed it. Suicide is a hard one to deal with on so many levels for so many people, ahhhh, love! Is it worth it? Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Thanks, Fez, I appreciate your comments, mate. No, nothing is worth taking your own life for, not even love. Of course, that's just my opinion.

Much obliged. :} ~Dean

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hey, Dean,
Sheezzzz, as I read this the sun is just beginning to filter through my kitchen windows; talk about setting up the story nicely, hee, hee.
It feels like coming into a life-story right at the very end; leaving the reader's imagination to determine the problems in this child's life, that led to this decision.
You certainly had the perfect background music for this eerie piece of work...nice!
Another great addition to the book, Dean.
Have a great day, Bill

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Hey, Bill. Thanks for reviewing this one, buddy. I'm glad to know you're enjoying these brief little snippets of horror. Much obliged for the thoughtful feedback. :} ~Dean

Comment from rod007

Excellent

A horrible suicide when his girlfriend left him through the note. He is dead or was that how he died--suicide or murder? What is he waiting or is it the monster with him that's waiting. Excellent story that poses questions which is as it should be. Well done, Dean.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Yep, he'd decided that life was no longer worth living since his gal left him, Rod. And the form hovering over Johnny's corpse is none other than the dark man himself, the Grim Reaper, come to claim his soul. Poor Johnny... but worse than that, poor mom.

Thanks for your review. :} ~Dean

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Something's missing when people commit suicide.There is a void in the lives of people who have nothing higher to hope in to depend on or to trust hence the reason they give up and get out
It is important to have your children know that you are there for them in every way so if even if they have not been taught to trust in God they can depend on and turn to you in trying times

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015

I agree completely, Erica. There is nothing nor anyone on the face of this earth worth taking your life over. Even in the darkest times when we feel we have no one, God is there for us if we need Him. My own children have been taught this from a very early age and are completely aware of the bible's teachings against suicide.

Thank you very much for voicing your opinions on this, and have a glorious Easter / resurrection Sunday.

~Dean

reply by emrpoems on 02-Apr-2015

Such a great feeling to meet people who have taught their children well. My mother did and I have followed in her footsteps. I know you have done likewise and that is good to know

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015

Crosby, Stills, Nash, and Young said it best, I think, in a song once called "Teach Your Children"...

"Teach
your children well
their father's hell did slowly go by,
And feed them on your dreams, the one they fix, the one you'll know by.
Don't you ever ask them why, if they told you, you would cry,
So just look at them and sigh and know they love you." ;}

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Another great one, Dean. I was thinking last night about the bats in my attic which occasionally sneak don for a visit. I bet you could make that into something creepy. Take care, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015

I'll definitely make a note of that, Debbie. Thanks very much for the idea as well as your review. :} ~Dean

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

A sad story this one Dean, suicide. Mum's final message to a son already gone and a great ending as the reaper waits, patiently. Good ending line....No one sings along.
This is a great series of little reads.

valda

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015

Thanks, Pearl. I'm really happy to know that you are enjoying this series.

Much obliged! :) ~Dean

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

This was just like opening the curtain on a stage play. The imagery was so solid, it left little to the imagination. The inclusion of the song types woven into what was taking place was very effective.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015

Thanks, DALLAS. I appreciate you taking the time to read & review this little snippet of "true life" horror, and for your thoughtful comments as well.

Much obliged. :} ~Dean