My Little Book of 5-7-5's
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Rocking The Boat"2015
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OOOPs! I won't even ask, just in case my head get's bitten off! LOL, dear me, Debra, are you having a bit of an off day? At home, at work or on here? Hmmm, I said I wouldn't ask, didn't I? I guess you can never stop me being nosey! Cheer up, my friend!! :) Sandra/
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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OOOPs! I won't even ask, just in case my head get's bitten off! LOL, dear me, Debra, are you having a bit of an off day? At home, at work or on here? Hmmm, I said I wouldn't ask, didn't I? I guess you can never stop me being nosey! Cheer up, my friend!! :) Sandra/
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Hi Sandra.... just family - but not the kids for a change LOL! I'm ok - just a bit disappointed - never mind, onwards and upwards! Much love, Debra x
Comment from misscookie
I can related to your write. There were times I to had to vent. I don
t do it as much as before I give those burden to the Lord. .... after I release the beast in me in a lady like way. LOL
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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I can related to your write. There were times I to had to vent. I don
t do it as much as before I give those burden to the Lord. .... after I release the beast in me in a lady like way. LOL
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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I love the idea of you releasing the beast in a lady-like way!! How do you do that?! You've got me laughing :D
Thank you for your great feedback :) love, Debra x
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My mother taught me that what ever I do or say. do it like a lady. so I get my harsh meaning across with a pleasant smile. it's like killing people with kindness. LOL.
Cooke You're very welcome.
until next time, have a blessed day.
Cookie
Comment from Smoothiecool
your few words portray well the way you feel and you are letting all know about it
good imagery
good use of "L" "M" consonance
good use of "O" "A: assonance
good use alliteration in
bloody, boat
mamma's mad
flows easy to understand
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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your few words portray well the way you feel and you are letting all know about it
good imagery
good use of "L" "M" consonance
good use of "O" "A: assonance
good use alliteration in
bloody, boat
mamma's mad
flows easy to understand
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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Thank you for your great feedback, Smoothiecool.... Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
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most welcome ...SC <:> Faye
Comment from Selina Stambi
What a fabulously fun way of getting it out of your system, Debra.
Here's to riled mums the world over!
hang in there, dear. They grow up far too fast.
Hugs and chuckes,
xxx
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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What a fabulously fun way of getting it out of your system, Debra.
Here's to riled mums the world over!
hang in there, dear. They grow up far too fast.
Hugs and chuckes,
xxx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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They sure do Sonali..... the kids didn't cause the storm this time - sometimes, family get it so wrong... :(
Well, I've said my piece, they've listened.... hopefully there won't be a repeat.
Kindest regards as always, Debra x
Comment from adewpearl
clever pairing of artwork and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
good use of enjambment
great imagery
excellent alliteration in all three lines
I love the impassioned tone, which will resonate with lots of mothers :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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clever pairing of artwork and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
good use of enjambment
great imagery
excellent alliteration in all three lines
I love the impassioned tone, which will resonate with lots of mothers :-) Brooke
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Hi Brooke :) Thank you for your great feedback, kindest regards as always, Debra x
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. It does look like the storms children can create. The Mom steps in and there is a worse storm. The seas become calm until the next time. Great work.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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I love the picture. It does look like the storms children can create. The Mom steps in and there is a worse storm. The seas become calm until the next time. Great work.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Thank you Ellie for your great feedback. Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment from gypsycaravan
Go on-get it out-loud as you want. Should be all capital letters for the shouting though. Hope the storm is over now and smooth sailing ahead for the rocking boat.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Go on-get it out-loud as you want. Should be all capital letters for the shouting though. Hope the storm is over now and smooth sailing ahead for the rocking boat.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Hope so! Thanks for your great feedback, Shirley :) love, Debra x
Comment from closetpoetjester
Well let's hope the waters are much calmer now Debs.
I'm a mumma myself and I know what you mean about standing up and protecting the little ones. It's instinct and we can't be blamed for that.
Profound feelings exclaimed here in short form. Well conveyed. You are ONE pissed off mamma! Hope you get it sorted.
Hugs P
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Well let's hope the waters are much calmer now Debs.
I'm a mumma myself and I know what you mean about standing up and protecting the little ones. It's instinct and we can't be blamed for that.
Profound feelings exclaimed here in short form. Well conveyed. You are ONE pissed off mamma! Hope you get it sorted.
Hugs P
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Cheers P :) I hope so too - I didn't leave much room for misunderstanding!! x
Comment from RichardFann
Thanks for this from-the-heart- poem.
There's nothing like a rant.
Liked the direct style,
and the expressive language,
because things often go wrong.
Short, sweet and witty.
As I don't know the reason, am very cautious about being witty in return.
A true story:
Friday, got text from library .
Book overdue.
Went to library. Computer error, as I knew.
Saw a new addition on the new additions shelf.
- Rushdie's 'Haroun and the Sea of Stories.'
Got home, read some, funny.
Then googled him to find he is 13th best author UK since 1945.
Top is Philip Larkin.
Guess where he lived.
Hull!
So wife and I plan to have a short break in Hull mid April to check him out!
All of that out an erroneous text!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this from-the-heart- poem.
There's nothing like a rant.
Liked the direct style,
and the expressive language,
because things often go wrong.
Short, sweet and witty.
As I don't know the reason, am very cautious about being witty in return.
A true story:
Friday, got text from library .
Book overdue.
Went to library. Computer error, as I knew.
Saw a new addition on the new additions shelf.
- Rushdie's 'Haroun and the Sea of Stories.'
Got home, read some, funny.
Then googled him to find he is 13th best author UK since 1945.
Top is Philip Larkin.
Guess where he lived.
Hull!
So wife and I plan to have a short break in Hull mid April to check him out!
All of that out an erroneous text!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Hi Richard :) Thanks for your great feedback, sensitivity and generous 6 star award! I appreciate it. Great story about your over due library book error resulting in a planned trip to East Yorkshire! We're near Wakefield in West Yorkshire about 40 mins away!
Comment from Glasstruth
Great alliteration in every line which is awesome for just 17 syllables. What rocked your boat? Don't know, but I feel the heat in your words. Poetry is a great outlet for our emotions. Well vent-crafted. Les
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Great alliteration in every line which is awesome for just 17 syllables. What rocked your boat? Don't know, but I feel the heat in your words. Poetry is a great outlet for our emotions. Well vent-crafted. Les
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Hi Les :) Thank you so much for your great feedback - I appreciate it :) Kindest regards, Debra