Comment from EMB

Excellent

How much of this is actually real stuff? There seems to be some code in here (as it usually does with your writing), but I'm not sure what it is. Interesting, though. :)

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015

Well, Here is the second one and you figure it out?
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Category: Spiritual Non-Fiction | Posted: January 31, 2015 | Chapters: 2 -3-
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A Dedication to my Lost Son Jason.
A chapter in the book "The Gift of Life Two."
"When I Wish, So Hard Upon A Star...
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Follows with Chapter four "Memories Stored in A Jar of Glass.'


"When I Wish, So Hard Upon A Star...
By Dr. Richard Edward Smrkovsky
{Written 11/26/2014}
"Written In Cell # 4 of "The Ocean County Correction Facility Toms River, New Jersey.
"Started at 3:00 AM. and Completed at 3:05AM. AM. EST."

"When I wish so hard...
"Upon a star no answer do I now hear...
"From afar."
"No voice, no face nor somber of...
"Embrace...
"My Wish...
"And whence my wish, so much I persist comes true...
"Will it be God...
"When I need before my time comes do?"
...
"When I wish so very, very, hard...
"Upon a star...
"I think of You, the past reflections...
"If only in *knew?"
...
"I would have spent more time with You instead of at work away the night and the day...
"Way back then...
'My **"Buddy Friend"...
"I would do...
"I would have spent more time...
"And I know think back then to all the Christmas's past...
"The **Month before at last...
"A son...
"My only one....
...
"Sleigh bells now don't glisten!'
"My wishing star isn't listening!'
"It's now all that now remains, distraught and caught in a web of ***discretion
heading forever in a downward direction!"
...
'"This was supposed to be a dream, a birthday ****celebration.
"Delightful nor FRIGHTFULL!"
"And as I awake, You were not here...
"Seems to me You just...
"Disappeared?"
"Never to return no matter how many stars I'm wishing...
"No basketball games I am watching or your songs Your voice
"Just pictures and foggy images in an old, glass en, frame,..
"Just rusted memories ...
"Screaming out Your name...

*knew-"**Buddy Friend"- my first poem written out of hundred's of thousands {through Jason's Spirit and on Jason's computer } only three weeks after his dearth."

<><><><><><><><><><><><><>"Buddy Friend."<><><><><><><><><><><><><><><>
{April 24, 2003}
"A dedication to Jason's Friends and family"
"I'm not her right now...
"But I'm not far...
"It's a place close by...
"Not far like a star...
...
"You'll feel this place...
"Take just a moment...
"You'll see''''
"And then you will know...
"Just where I will be...


{A dedication by Jason Richard Smkovsky through his Father "Jason was killed in a terrible and tragic accident.
***Month- "The actual death for jay is listed as March 30th, 2003 but as an organ donor the last machine keeping His heart beating was disconnected April 1st {April Fool's day 2003."
****Discretion- Jason was only about two miles celebrating His oldest Daughter Nichole's birthday that day."
"It was at Nicole's father's house {as I am just the step-father, I was not invited and if I was...
"that crazy and mentally-ill kid would never have driven my Jason...
"Home...
"Special thanks goes out first to heavenly father sand his only Son Jesus Christ, Fan story and tom the administrator, Fan Art Review and this amazing artist" Birds Eye view" along with the picture "Father and Son's Joy Ride and last but not least my only Son Jason Richard Smrkovsky 11-05-1984~3-30-2003.
'Jason was an Organ and tissue donor.'
To learn more about "Organ-Tissue donor's and helping Call 1-8---DONORS-1 and tell my friend Lara S.Moretti the LSW. with "The Gift of Life" Philadelphia, Pennsylvania that Jay said hey!"
Ricky1024..
Thanks...



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Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Ricky. I haven't seen you post anything for a while mate and I wondered where you were. I am always interested to read your stories, I think it is a good way to heal. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015

Thankz 4 dat Feral!
"Been incarcerated for 63 days {Through the Holidays} but thatz OK mate!
"Created 109 books to total out the year at 450.
{Mostly needing attention!}
Ricky1024

Comment from mommerry

Good

This was most definitely an unusual piece. I got a glimpse of despair, possibly being told from a place of incarceration, but I really could not make a lot of sense out of it. In my opinion, it needs more work.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015

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