My Little Book of 5-7-5's
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Comment from Thamp
Awesome. You are so clever. I forget that there could be notes after the poem - If I would have read them I wouldn't have had to look up Basho. I love your work.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Awesome. You are so clever. I forget that there could be notes after the poem - If I would have read them I wouldn't have had to look up Basho. I love your work.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Hi Thamp, thanks for your great feedback :) LOL at you looking up Basho...... that's something I would've done! Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Leineco
LOL. . .you may not think you understand haiku. . .but girl you sure do understand senryu !! Great use of haiku's cousin ;-)
(5 stars) = EXCELLENT. I would recommend this to a friend! I enjoyed the read and found both the content and the construction admirably accomplished.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015
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LOL. . .you may not think you understand haiku. . .but girl you sure do understand senryu !! Great use of haiku's cousin ;-)
(5 stars) = EXCELLENT. I would recommend this to a friend! I enjoyed the read and found both the content and the construction admirably accomplished.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015
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Hi lorraine :) Thank you for your kind and encouraging feedback! Glad you enjoyed this one :) Hugs, Debra
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words portray the message well of not finding a haiku as words allude one
great satori on the poet Basho
flows
cheers smoothiecool
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words portray the message well of not finding a haiku as words allude one
great satori on the poet Basho
flows
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
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most welcome Debra
have a blessed day ...SC <:> (*:*) smiles
Comment from adewpearl
I love the pairing of this photo and 5/7/5 poem
good alliteration in perplexed/put/pen
many readers will identify with the speaker who has not figured out how to navigate through the myriad haiku rules/requirements LOL
the final line is hysterically funny, as Basho has nothing to worry about as far as being displaced by the speaker as a writer of acclaimed haiku LOL This is the wittiest thing I've read in a long time :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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I love the pairing of this photo and 5/7/5 poem
good alliteration in perplexed/put/pen
many readers will identify with the speaker who has not figured out how to navigate through the myriad haiku rules/requirements LOL
the final line is hysterically funny, as Basho has nothing to worry about as far as being displaced by the speaker as a writer of acclaimed haiku LOL This is the wittiest thing I've read in a long time :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Hi Brooke :) Thank you for your great feedback - glad to tickle your funny bone! Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from misscookie
I had to smile as I read your poem I thought it was cute.
But your author notes took the cake, for I feel the same way, is this really a fluke? Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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I had to smile as I read your poem I thought it was cute.
But your author notes took the cake, for I feel the same way, is this really a fluke? Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you miss cookie :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
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You're very welcome. have a safe and blessed day.
Cookie
Comment from krys123
Debra; While you achieve the requirements for this 5/7/5 syllabic format of the contest. But this being a 5/7/5 type of poem you've written that more like a haiku for your last line of or satori sums up your poem quite well and doesn't seem to correlate with the other two lines were 5/7/5 type of poem does. At least that is my summation. I I do like the photograph that you chosen for this poem as it represents and complements your poem very much and the lines in your poem reflect that. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Debra; While you achieve the requirements for this 5/7/5 syllabic format of the contest. But this being a 5/7/5 type of poem you've written that more like a haiku for your last line of or satori sums up your poem quite well and doesn't seem to correlate with the other two lines were 5/7/5 type of poem does. At least that is my summation. I I do like the photograph that you chosen for this poem as it represents and complements your poem very much and the lines in your poem reflect that. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you Alex for your feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra
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You are so welcome my friend
Comment from Val Crisson
Haiku alludes many, because we really don't understand the "moment" caught. But none the less, little presentation and actually quite a nice satori line. Though I think Basho would be amused.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Haiku alludes many, because we really don't understand the "moment" caught. But none the less, little presentation and actually quite a nice satori line. Though I think Basho would be amused.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Val, for your kind and encouraging feedback :) Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from Max Edon
What a cute little poem. I love to read haiku, but I find it is pretty tough to write a good haiku. Good luck in the contest! This poem is a winner. Thank you for sharing this great poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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What a cute little poem. I love to read haiku, but I find it is pretty tough to write a good haiku. Good luck in the contest! This poem is a winner. Thank you for sharing this great poem.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Max for your great comments and good luck wishes! Kindest regards, Debra :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Tatarka2
I loved this, and I loved the picture with it. It could have been written about me. Thanks for sharing this, and for your honest, tongue-in-cheek attitude about it.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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I loved this, and I loved the picture with it. It could have been written about me. Thanks for sharing this, and for your honest, tongue-in-cheek attitude about it.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Dean Kuch
Geesh, I feel ya, Debra. It seems when I write 5-7-5, people will invariably tell me that it reads like senryu, and when I write haiku, people say it reads like 5-7-5...you get the picture. It's a lot harder than most people think it is.
Good work! ~Dean
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Geesh, I feel ya, Debra. It seems when I write 5-7-5, people will invariably tell me that it reads like senryu, and when I write haiku, people say it reads like 5-7-5...you get the picture. It's a lot harder than most people think it is.
Good work! ~Dean
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Dean, for your empathetic feedback! Kindest regards, Debra :)
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You're welcome, Debra. Write on, and right on! :}