Dolphins
...let them find your happiness44 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
I loved this before I read your notes. Wow, that first stanza is stunning. It goes along perfectly with the second and it doesn't need explanation except to look up Salacia is one isn't familiar. The last line actually took me out of a bit of a funk. Not bad when a poem can lift one's spirits! mikey
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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I loved this before I read your notes. Wow, that first stanza is stunning. It goes along perfectly with the second and it doesn't need explanation except to look up Salacia is one isn't familiar. The last line actually took me out of a bit of a funk. Not bad when a poem can lift one's spirits! mikey
Comment Written 10-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Thank you, Mikey. It is always good to hear that a poem has touched a heart and found a common chord.
Comment from Treischel
This lovely free verse poem brings to life, through its imagery, the mythology of Neptune and Salacia. It carries the mood of the god of the sea. An interesting use of caves and dolphins to express depression.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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This lovely free verse poem brings to life, through its imagery, the mythology of Neptune and Salacia. It carries the mood of the god of the sea. An interesting use of caves and dolphins to express depression.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Thank you, Tom. There is an interesting dissonance between the dolorous sound of dolphins and their happy nature.
Comment from mikemagine
If I understand your poem, you're talking about deep sadness and the choice to be so...You're advising finding one's own "dolphins"...Great little poem!
Mike
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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If I understand your poem, you're talking about deep sadness and the choice to be so...You're advising finding one's own "dolphins"...Great little poem!
Mike
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Thank you, Mike. Your interpretation is a perfect echo of what I had in mind.
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Sure thing, my friend. And I'm glad I got your meaning:-)
Mike
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, Tony, this might sound a little strange (over the top) but your poem has brought tears to my eyes for the pure beauty of the story behind it, and the poem itself - I'd never heard this one, and yet have always felt a strong affinity with dolphins. When on my first-ever dive cruise, dolphins came to play in the (front) wake of the cabin cruiser, and believe me, we were travelling! It was the most joyous of sights, and the feeling was indescribable.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Oh, Tony, this might sound a little strange (over the top) but your poem has brought tears to my eyes for the pure beauty of the story behind it, and the poem itself - I'd never heard this one, and yet have always felt a strong affinity with dolphins. When on my first-ever dive cruise, dolphins came to play in the (front) wake of the cabin cruiser, and believe me, we were travelling! It was the most joyous of sights, and the feeling was indescribable.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Thank you, Dawn. Dolphins are quite inspirational in the joyous nature of their movement. So glad that you liked this poem and that it touched your heart.
Comment from butterfly4265
Greek mythology is fascinating, and thank you for your very helpful Author Notes. Your poem is incredibly moving and filled with sadness as Neptune years for Salacia. I am a sucker for a happy ending although that wasn't portrayed in your poem. It doesn't detract from the quality which has excellent flow and imagery. Very nicely done and thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Greek mythology is fascinating, and thank you for your very helpful Author Notes. Your poem is incredibly moving and filled with sadness as Neptune years for Salacia. I am a sucker for a happy ending although that wasn't portrayed in your poem. It doesn't detract from the quality which has excellent flow and imagery. Very nicely done and thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Thank you Butterfly for your kind review. So glad that you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from LadyCosgrove
It's a good poem and reflects the mythology, as given in your footnote ...but I feel the footnote material should be woven into the poem somehow, as it doesn't come across clearly without it.
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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It's a good poem and reflects the mythology, as given in your footnote ...but I feel the footnote material should be woven into the poem somehow, as it doesn't come across clearly without it.
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Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014
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Thank you, Lady Cosgrove. You are right. I could have expanded on this more fully in the poem itself. I appreciate your comment.
Comment from CheyLGwriter
This piece is so creative. It takes you on that journey to find that lost love. I love greek mythology, so this appealed even more to me. Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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This piece is so creative. It takes you on that journey to find that lost love. I love greek mythology, so this appealed even more to me. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Many thanks, Chey. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Tony, this is a very well written poem in free verse and thank you for the very informative author notes. A good read with a lovely picture. Of course, I knew about Neptune the Roman god of the sea, and Poseidon as he is known in Greek mythology but nothing of the females in your author notes, so thank you. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Tony, this is a very well written poem in free verse and thank you for the very informative author notes. A good read with a lovely picture. Of course, I knew about Neptune the Roman god of the sea, and Poseidon as he is known in Greek mythology but nothing of the females in your author notes, so thank you. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Dorothy. It's wonderful what one can find on the Internet these days! LOL
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Yes Tony, what would we do without Google? I saw a good joke recently - 'a woman sitting at the bedside of her child telling a bedtime story about the all seeing, all knowing God - then she explained to the child, you know dear, he's like Google with a beard' Dx
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Love this! Now all I have to do is remember it! ...or perhaps I can just Google 'Google jokes'! LOL
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Hi - LOL. Actually it was in the Oldie magazine. It's a great monthly mag. Some good, really interesting articles plus some on the ball jokes. Google it! LOL Dx
Comment from RGstar
Greek Mythology is one of my favorite subjects. Good to see the dolphin in focus. Fantastic imagery here, Tony. Well Done.
I like the informative author's note also.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Greek Mythology is one of my favorite subjects. Good to see the dolphin in focus. Fantastic imagery here, Tony. Well Done.
I like the informative author's note also.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Many thanks, RG. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tony, I enjoyed this one. It has a way of pulling me into a moment of weightless thought. What comes and goes within each passing piece of time. Loved your imagery and a sort of soothing story muse pondering. Loved it.
I did think that using "darkness" twice so close together line wise could be adjusted for more powerful unity.
Possible Suggestion:
"the blinding darkness of thought" // the blinding dark thoughts
A wonderful work and thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Dear Tony, I enjoyed this one. It has a way of pulling me into a moment of weightless thought. What comes and goes within each passing piece of time. Loved your imagery and a sort of soothing story muse pondering. Loved it.
I did think that using "darkness" twice so close together line wise could be adjusted for more powerful unity.
Possible Suggestion:
"the blinding darkness of thought" // the blinding dark thoughts
A wonderful work and thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Thanks very much, Maureen . I was a bit uneasy about that, too. Will go back and have another look.