The Virus
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Day Two"Changing the world's attitudes
4 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Goodness me, we just don't realise how difficult life would be, in fact, that life could basically end if the world's population went blind. How hideous it would be. Must get to the next page. :) xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Goodness me, we just don't realise how difficult life would be, in fact, that life could basically end if the world's population went blind. How hideous it would be. Must get to the next page. :) xsx Sandra
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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I hope you continue following. Thanks...John
Comment from NicciFaye
What a horrible horrible experience. I thought this was straight forward and provided enough detail with being overly detailed. One suggestion though...you had one sentence that stated.."The stranglehold of politics and religion on 'weak' minds would have to be released. The author makes this seem like a personal statement of opinion. If so...that is fine I would only suggest to replace the word "weak" with impressionable. Other than that looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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What a horrible horrible experience. I thought this was straight forward and provided enough detail with being overly detailed. One suggestion though...you had one sentence that stated.."The stranglehold of politics and religion on 'weak' minds would have to be released. The author makes this seem like a personal statement of opinion. If so...that is fine I would only suggest to replace the word "weak" with impressionable. Other than that looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the awakening slap. I hope you correct me as we go forward....John
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I will do my best. Great start.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Cogitator, Well I have read the first three chapters of this fascinating story my friend, this is a superb piece of writing and I really like the way you set it up to have the characters in different scenarios when the virus struck, it's a great way to keep the readers interest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Hi Cogitator, Well I have read the first three chapters of this fascinating story my friend, this is a superb piece of writing and I really like the way you set it up to have the characters in different scenarios when the virus struck, it's a great way to keep the readers interest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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The characters will meet....John
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Looking forward to it John
Comment from mommerry
You certainly show us what this sort of plague would mean in so many different circumstances. Your essay offers much food for thought. No negative critique from me.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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You certainly show us what this sort of plague would mean in so many different circumstances. Your essay offers much food for thought. No negative critique from me.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Much more coming up. This is actually a fictional account for me to interweave my essays. Easier reading. Thanks for your input...John