Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

great pairing of photo and poem - that is my all-time favorite ride, by the way
I love the play on words in your title
salt and battery is also very witty and laugh-inducing
your 5/7/5 poem evokes the spirit of the county fair well :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

Thank you Brooke for taking the time from your own wonderful words to peek at mine. I had fun with this one and agree with you about the ride. It is great, however my heart will always belong to the Carousel. So much imagination time and as many daydreams as there were animals to ride. - Wendy

reply by adewpearl on 03-Oct-2014

Wendy, I have a nostalgic love of the carousel, but as a ride experience, it lacks a bit of oomph LOL

Comment from giovannimariatommaso

Excellent

This little 5/7/5 brings out the joy of children at the county fair riding, eating, and experiencing every emotion of fun there is to experience. The Child inside too, has open eyes wide.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. I do try to let my inner child out to giggle from time to time.

reply by giovannimariatommaso on 29-Sep-2014

Y/W GMT

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a wonderfully written entry which meets all of the requirements splendidly. Nice play on words with "a" followed by "salt". I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. I have never been able to pass up a pun if it jumped into my head. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very well written. The picture evokes memories and the words do, too.I think you mean "buttery" in the second line. I enjoyed reading this and my inner child did too.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Hi there. Thank so much for taking the time to read and review my words. Actually I did mean foods all covered in batter and deep fried. A bit of poetic license with battery instead of saying battered, I did play with buttery as my other option but it wasn't as true to the pun. I am glad you introduced your inner child to mine. Perhaps we should set up a play date.

reply by RYME4U on 28-Sep-2014

Sorry, That makes perfect sense. I had an electrical battery in mind.Very good poem and so descriptive. I think my inner child is napping right now but the next time a "child's poem contest" is run, maybe we can get together.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You have a great picture to go with your poem. I like both of them. Your syllable count is good. No changes. Good job and good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the read and review. I always have too much sticky gooey fun at Fairs. It was an easy one to get into.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I absolutely love this ..And inner child squealing cancels all calories.
I'm reviewing poem while eating chocolate Chip cookies ...busted. Once every few weeks is ok. Right???
God bless

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

I do hope those are broken cookies because I'm told they have cancelled calories too. Thank you for giving my poem some of your precious writing time.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

a salt and battery food binge..?.. A Fair of the Heart...

really enjoy your play on words in this one. A very fun read this late of an evening. My wishes for good luck in this contest. AT=/

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. As to the puns, I just can't help myself. I appreciate your good wishes too.