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Short poems poking fun at the human condition.

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Comment from michaelcahill
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Hahaha! That was LOL like what laugh out loud meant before it became an internet tag. I am a proponent of God must have a wonderful sense of humor taking a look at humanity. I have no doubt that this is exactly what that is. What a surprise. You did say "plump" though, but you turned me around with, "glistens white in night sky"! Ahh. What lovely take on nature will follow!!! mikey

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
    I don't know about you, but my "cheeks" are still plump. :-)
Comment from Rosalyne
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Hi, Shari.
This is very clever! Mooning is an act many of us did one time in our lives. LOL I really like how you've taken this concept and given it a double meaning.
Bye
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
    It's on my bucket list of things to do. LOL
Comment from Shirley B
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Hi Shari, Great senryu. The moon is beautiful tonight. You are a master of this form. The moon is beautiful tonight. Something tells me you have done this a couple of time in your teenage life. :) Shirley

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
    Me? I wouldn't have the courage to do this in my youth. Hey, maybe I'll put in on my bucket list. There's still time to try it. :-)
Comment from boxergirl
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Ha. Mooning is a funny human tradition of which I regretably was too good of a girl to do that. Is it too late for me. I wonder. 8-)

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
    Hey, it's still on my bucket list too. :-)
Comment from catch22
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Hi Shari, what a clever and sarcastic little senryu. It's almost a spoof of the romantic and mystical. Many lovers and religions revere the moon, but you manage to turn the poetic and romanticized on its bum. Very funny little write.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
    Thanks, gail. A full moon can still be romantic. I'm just funnin' the one cut in half. LOL
Comment from Glasstruth
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LOL. Having a God with a sense of humor is what we all need. Is God really imperfect? Each to his own interpreting. The last line is a really killer! Les

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
    I knew you'd get a kick out of this, Les.
reply by Glasstruth on 27-Sep-2014
    You bet I did. :)
Comment from amanda98653
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This is an exceptional write, S.

A unique imagery is portrayed in the first two verses.

"God's mooning us"-- clever phrasing. We aren't the brightest creatures alive, so maybe we do deserve to be scorned by Him.

Even human beings insult each other regularly. Lol.

Hugs

Amanda




 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
    Thanks Amanda for the exceptional rating. I've heard it rumored that earth's is God's experiment. L0L
Comment from adewpearl
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Love the pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent senryu form
good consonance in circle glistens, good assonance too
I love the visual you create and the wonderful humor in your play on words in the final line
this is just delightful :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
    Thanks, Brooke. I always appreciate that you point out my poetic devices.
Comment from DALLAS01
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ha Ha. If I had a six left, this would have it. Love the wit and humor. What a thought, think he is really that disgudted with us?

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
    Well, the weather patterns these days could be viewed as his vengenge. LOL. Appreciate the invisible six.
Comment from mikemagine
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This is original, lol! Yeah, maybe sometimes we do deserve less of God's goodness...Then too, those who worship the moon would say something like "NO! The Moon is ALWAYS be-au-ti-ful! What is wrong with any size, phase, or shape of the Moon?!" Reply: Well, there times I hear quite a bit of howling...

GOOD One!

Mike

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
    Yep, those werewolves love the full moon. :-)
reply by mikemagine on 28-Sep-2014
    AH-OOOOHH! :)