Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Mystery Poet

An excellent entry for the prompt. Great wit and word play .... I shivered when reading your poem ... even without that spectacular image, the power and the freeze of your icy gusts really makes me feel frozen. . "arctic blast" ..... power words. I love your use of 'dying breath" .... enjoyed the clever personification and in "inhales". I wish you the best of luck. I'm sure this will be a top contender. Well done. Warmest Regards and huge warm hugs - Lovinia xoxoxo

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

thank you

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your syllable count spot on

your few words in three lines portrays the arctic blast that shuts down the power

good visual

good enjambment to allow free flow

cheers smoothiecool

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you

reply by Smoothiecool on 29-Aug-2014

welcome..SC

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Yep. Three snowflakes and the lights go out. The arctic blast line nails the prompt. Reviewing a 3/5/3 is like
dividing up a peanut in a crowd. Excellent.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Great air poem in the required 3-5-3 syllable count form. I like the bit about the power grid. Good luck in the contest.
teresa

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You have an interesting take on the prompt. I enjoyed reading it. Because of the strict syllable count, there is not much room to change anything. I did count the syllables and yours are correct. Good job and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

thanks for reviewing.