Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Thank you for not making time travel the central, sci-fi focus- nothing complicated, just an app really more akin to magic. I wonder if the DVD seller has a few Gremlins stashed away. Where can I get the app? I owe Helen of Troy a visit.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014

Hehe, yes I can think of some uses. Indeed, the time travel is a story point but the focus is Lizzy and Darren. On reflection, the shop does sound like it should stock little mogwais doesn't it?

Mike

Comment from lindalcreel

Excellent

I wonder if the boy saw that Darren has a wife. Now I have more questions, wondering how he could possibly know that if Darren was time traveling. Guess we'll have to wait for the next post to see how this mystery will unravel.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thank you, Linda! It will all fall into place :-).

Mike

reply by lindalcreel on 08-Jul-2014

I have no doubt.Looking forward to the next installment.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Time travel has met the way of other fantasies. The mode of travel is limited. This is very well written with an interesting flow of words/

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Charlie - I'm really glad you liked it :-).

Mike

reply by c_lucas on 07-Jul-2014

You're welcome, Mike. Charlie

Comment from Christopher Lones

Exceptional

Haven't read the earlier chapters but this one got me hooked right off the bat. The very concept of a man cheating on his past girlfriend with his current wife is genius. I look forward to reading future chapters.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Lones :-). The first three chapters were from Lizzy's perspective as this strange guy keeps appearing to show her strange new cooking methods and ingredients. Now we get to see the more complicated issue of what's happening on Darren's side of the equation. Really glad you enjoyed it!

Mike

Comment from babylonia

Exceptional

Mike,
I really loved the change in POV. It helps to know what and why this man chooses to return in time to change the way someone cooks. LOL Who does that? Oh, yeah, people from our imaginations. Just a couple of thoughts.

ROFLMAO The picture alone is worth a sixer.

Mr. Denny

Imagery is excellent and definitely can't wait to read more.
Love,
Barbara

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thank you, Barbara :-). In the original version, this was the start of part 2, so there was a half of the tale in each pov. I thought it would be fun to show the flip side of the coin. So glad you liked it!

Mike

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is a bit more philosophical than my brain can handle this early in the morning. I am sure it will all fall together in the next chapter. I do understand Darren's dilemma..I'd be confused too. This is still fun to read and I anxiously look forward to the next part.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thank you, my dear :-). Yeah, you know I can't resist getting technical! The explanation is only part way there - it will all make sense, I promise!

Mike

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I indeed did enjoy this chapter, Mike, and am looking forward to the next. You have a way of hooking the reader immediately, leading him through the chapter, linked to your humor, and the strange credibility of the plot, and leave him hanging by his fingertips at the edge of a cliff.

Good work, Mike.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Lol, thanks, Jay :-). I can't help slipping a bit of humour in - I think it benefits any story. This was my chance to show the other side of what's happening, nit only from Darren's perspective but that of the modern world.

Mike

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

amazing experience of his life, but - I added the comma
laying on one side - lying
I love his friend's sarcastic attitude in their conversation about his present day wife and time travel girlfriend
good speculation about what happens to his body in present time while he is off traveling
interesting explanation in the closing
Brooke

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thank you, Brooke. When he finds out the answers to his speculation, it's quite a shock!

Mike :-)

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Wow. I don't know where you're headed with this, but things keep getting deeper. And I'm still waiting for that sandwich!

he'd woken up in bed, laying (lying) on one side,

and one occasion clutching a manky, half-eaten burger in (from?) a giant bin behind a fast food restaurant.

He (Darren?) remembered reading how, in Far East cultures,

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Thank you, my friend - for the catches and the enthusiasm :-). I couldn't resist delving into the implications, but it will al make sense - I promise!

Mike

Comment from Kenneth Schaal

Excellent

I am enjoying the humor here in general. For every good thing that happens to Darren during his travels, it's off-set by misadventure at home plate. It seems the solution would be to high-tail it back to Lizzy, and try to find gainful employment there. It's an interesting question proposed by the event of time travel; I can't tell if you've actually answered it or not, but it makes for a good plot. Very enjoyable. Kenny

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 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014

Haha, Thanks Kenny :-). I do my best to answer it - you'll see what I mean in the next two chapters.

Mike