Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Crikey - I'll never think of Jack and
Jill as a nursery rhyme again --- or
go near a well!!


I don't know how missed this one - I've only just come across it - must have been a "blank" contest

Margaret

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015

Yep, it was a blind contest entry, Margaret. But, hey, better late than never, right, LOL?

Thanks for having a go at it. Much obliged. :)

~Dean

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hey,

Another one from before my time!
This is a great little tale, and in only 50 words too. very impressive. Poor Jill? Sod that... poor Jack, I say.

Nicely penned.
G

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015

Yeah, the blighter! Heh-heh...

Thanks for taking a gander at the shortie, G-Man. It's appreciated. :} ~Dean

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi my friend. Congrats on winning a place in this contest. (It's hard to do, isn't it?) I like the whole idea...Clever...as you always are. Ever here this: "Jack and Jill went up the hill...each with a buck and a quarter. Jill came down with two and a half...you know they didn't go up for water.

See ya soon, pardner. Bob

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014

Ha, ha, that's gr-r-r-r-e-a-t, Bob! Thanks for looking in on me, and I'm really glad that you enjoyed my take on the old nursery rhyme.

Much obliged, my friend!

Comment from faragon

Excellent

Very Chilling!!! You sure do have a way with words...the moonlit night...wet hands...sends chills up my spine. Great job! Jane

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014

Thanks, Jane. I'm really glad you liked my more horrific take on that old nursery rhyme. Thanks so much for the complimentary review!

Comment from Chocolate Chip

Excellent

What a take on the beloved story. I enjoyed your version much better! You put something on my mind by asking the question, "Haven't you ever wondered?" & silenced them by the conclusion given. Nicely composed, proving much can be done w/ good writing & a great imagination! Smiles ;) CC

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, CC. I really appreciate your kind comments and thoughtful review.

Comment from evilynne

Exceptional

Thanks for the screams. I never did wonder, but now I know anyway and I love it. Everything you write is well written; it's scary.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks so much for digging this one up, dusting it off, and giving it a look-see, evilynne. I am really happy that you enjoyed reading it, and I sincerely appreciate your thoughtful review.~Dean

Comment from JM

Excellent

Well, I never thought about what happened to Jack after he broke his crown. This is an interesting tale. I will have to save it for Halloween. Great job.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks for digging this one up, dusting it off, and digging in, JM. I really appreciate you giving me your opinions on this shortie. I have always wondered to what happened to both Jack and Jill. In my world, at least, I guess I now know, LOL. :]

Thanks so much again, my friend. I truly appreciate it!

reply by JM on 31-Jul-2014

Are you going to tell us what happened to Jill after she met up with Jack? :-)

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Well I heard she's up to her neck with problems, mired in a very deep, dark situation. But, you know how rumors go...heh-heh

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Yikes! I just swallowed my gum. LOL. Great way to spice up an old tale. I must admit that the original just makes me sad at Jack's clumsy waste of a bucket of good water. This however, is a pleasing end at least.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks for checking it out for me, and for giving me your opinions on it, Nomi. I really appreciate it!

Comment from amahra

Excellent

OMG Dean. I didn't know you did a take on Jack and Jill. I just posted a fun poem of Jack and Jill. I do so much serious stuff I want to do something lighthearted and fun.But some are offended. Some people on here don't know to lightened up. Anyway congratulation on being a runner-up.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

I did wonder when I read the sad news years ago that Jack broke his crown. I had assumed he died of his injuries, but I didn't think that he fell down the well. Anything's possible, and things do get lost in the re-telling of nursery rhymes, you just might be right on the money. Congrats on your second place finish. I'm proud of you!
Rose.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014