haiku (Bridge of the Gods)
haiku - 17 syllables or under22 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Learning about the world about us is also an important part of a poem's aesthetic appeal and this River Haiku achieves this beautifully - and a great pic
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Learning about the world about us is also an important part of a poem's aesthetic appeal and this River Haiku achieves this beautifully - and a great pic
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Thank you, for the review and support
Comment from royowen
A good entry in this river haiku contest! I quite like this poem that has a likeable theme, with an attractive photo to combine and give it a lift! I hope you do well in the contest! Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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A good entry in this river haiku contest! I quite like this poem that has a likeable theme, with an attractive photo to combine and give it a lift! I hope you do well in the contest! Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Roy, I'm thrilled you liked it.
Comment from GabbyLew
Thanks for the author notes; I now understand the images formed.
It fits all the criteria and I think that it's a great haiku. The satori is strong, and the imagery used is great.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the author notes; I now understand the images formed.
It fits all the criteria and I think that it's a great haiku. The satori is strong, and the imagery used is great.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Bobby Jo
Another beautiful picture of water and a bridge that paints a picture in our hearts. this is really good. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Another beautiful picture of water and a bridge that paints a picture in our hearts. this is really good. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from sgalletti
Hi Val! Well, I lived in the great Northwest for 20 years and it is wonderful to see other poets including the names of the rivers they love so well, as I did in my own poem. I particularly appreciate, in your haiku, the juxtaposition of two concrete images that invite the reader to do the contemplating and interpretation, as opposed to you "telling" it to them. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Hi Val! Well, I lived in the great Northwest for 20 years and it is wonderful to see other poets including the names of the rivers they love so well, as I did in my own poem. I particularly appreciate, in your haiku, the juxtaposition of two concrete images that invite the reader to do the contemplating and interpretation, as opposed to you "telling" it to them. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review, Sue. Yes, I did read you haiku and liked it very much. I agree with you that specific words make it a richer haiku, but you would not believe how many weird reviews I received on this one about it being to remote (the northwest). None the less, we must carry on.
Comment from amahra
I loved the art work you chose for this haiku. I thought the haiku is suppose to be 5-7-5. I counted yours to be 4-8-5. But I guess it doesn't have to be exact.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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I loved the art work you chose for this haiku. I thought the haiku is suppose to be 5-7-5. I counted yours to be 4-8-5. But I guess it doesn't have to be exact.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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The rules have changed for American haiku. They need to be 17 syllables or under, as long as they read short (syllable count)/long (syllable count)/ short (syllable count). None the less, I really appreciate your very generous review.
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Oh, thank you. I didn't know.
Comment from Charlene0513
To Val Crisson,
A welcomed time of the year when the salmon take their last few steps to see the end of what nature has provided for them.
Nice flow and imagery.
Charlene
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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To Val Crisson,
A welcomed time of the year when the salmon take their last few steps to see the end of what nature has provided for them.
Nice flow and imagery.
Charlene
Comment Written 25-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Charlene.
Comment from l.raven
HI Val, this is just beautiful...you can almost see the water rolling...I have never heard of this bridge...but what love to go see it...I love your poem and your picture is beautiful...so very nicely done...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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HI Val, this is just beautiful...you can almost see the water rolling...I have never heard of this bridge...but what love to go see it...I love your poem and your picture is beautiful...so very nicely done...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Linda. Many people have never heard of the Columbia River, I am sadly finding out. It is an amazing sight to see. Thanks again for your wonderful support.
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You are so welcome Val...luff ya Linda xxoo
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you are so welcome Val...luff Linda xxoo
Comment from Taffspride
Well written haiku Val with good imagery. You certainly have adhered to all the rules of the contest.
Although traditional haiku does not require illustration, I feel what have chosen here compliments your work perfectly.
And although I know I should not dwell on the art-work since it is not necessary. Your words paint the picture and give pause for reflection. I do have to say that one of the clouds actually looks like a salmon so compliments the haiku well.
Your notes certainly explains to those who are not aware, that the Chinook Indian are not just connected with nature, since they embrace it.
I wish you good luck in the contest, I think you have a strong contender here.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Well written haiku Val with good imagery. You certainly have adhered to all the rules of the contest.
Although traditional haiku does not require illustration, I feel what have chosen here compliments your work perfectly.
And although I know I should not dwell on the art-work since it is not necessary. Your words paint the picture and give pause for reflection. I do have to say that one of the clouds actually looks like a salmon so compliments the haiku well.
Your notes certainly explains to those who are not aware, that the Chinook Indian are not just connected with nature, since they embrace it.
I wish you good luck in the contest, I think you have a strong contender here.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014
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Well, what a wonderful surprise to hear from you! I thought you'd left the Fanstory Fold. I'm so glad you liked this enough to give it a "six," as the reviews have been interesting to say the least. Many people have never heard of the Columbia, and just can't seem to "get" it. I always wonder why some people can't just take haiku as it's meant to be, but I'll stop here. I'm thrilled to hear from you, and the "six" was a wonderful surprise. Thank you once again. Val
Comment from Karen B.
Nicely done haiku with great imagery, and the author notes helped me to understand the significance of each line. Perfect artwork to match. Best wishes in the voting booth!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Nicely done haiku with great imagery, and the author notes helped me to understand the significance of each line. Perfect artwork to match. Best wishes in the voting booth!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Karen. I really debated on the "author's notes," as I hate ponderous explanations about a haiku. But in this case, I felt them necessary so I'm glad to hear they help you with the review.