Bible Stories in Rhyme
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Dare to be a David"Poetry and Stories from the Bible
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Carolyn - I try to stand up to what challenges come my way. Even if they have me crumbling I am soon looking for a way to crawl back up and face the storm again. Nicely penned and reflective for me....pondering its powerful message.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Dear Carolyn - I try to stand up to what challenges come my way. Even if they have me crumbling I am soon looking for a way to crawl back up and face the storm again. Nicely penned and reflective for me....pondering its powerful message.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Dear Maureen,
I am glad this old story poem brought renewed courage to your hear. I love you, stay 'up' as much as you can. Wish we were closer together (mile wise), I would love to see you.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from lakeport
Dare to be a David, indeed that's a beautiful expressd story poem, very nice rhyming. I enjoyed resading it, God bless you,. Hugs!lakeport.
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Dare to be a David, indeed that's a beautiful expressd story poem, very nice rhyming. I enjoyed resading it, God bless you,. Hugs!lakeport.
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Thanks lakeport, I appreciate the kind review and rating. Glad you liked 'Dare to be a David'.
:-) Carolyn
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your welcome,Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment from Sanku
I enjoyed this poem dedicated to Roy Owen.David's story is well told through the medium of music.And a moral included too.yes a little bit of david will go a long way .How I wish I had that little bit.
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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I enjoyed this poem dedicated to Roy Owen.David's story is well told through the medium of music.And a moral included too.yes a little bit of david will go a long way .How I wish I had that little bit.
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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We all have courage inside us and the ability to love God more than self. Sometimes we just have to step out and show it. Thank you for your wonderful comments. :-) Carolyn
Comment from 9999pool
To battle for the Lord is a show of faith and courage.
We should never be afraid to mention Him in our conversations to avoid a raised eyebrow.
We should encourage others to follow His footsteps of compassion and loving kindness.
Great write and well penned. I might as well changed my pen name to david9999pool. Smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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To battle for the Lord is a show of faith and courage.
We should never be afraid to mention Him in our conversations to avoid a raised eyebrow.
We should encourage others to follow His footsteps of compassion and loving kindness.
Great write and well penned. I might as well changed my pen name to david9999pool. Smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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I have no doubt you would 'Dare to be a David.'
Thank you so much Ritchie,
Love, Carolyn
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Maybe i can tell God i want to be David in heaven, perhaps? Smiles.
Hugs, bro Ritchie. :))
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Lovely poem to read, Carolyn. The rhyme is unforced and fluent, enhancing the flow of your story in a poem. Very well done.
Kind regards
Sarah
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Lovely poem to read, Carolyn. The rhyme is unforced and fluent, enhancing the flow of your story in a poem. Very well done.
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Thanks Sarah, I appreciate your kind comments.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very well penned and very meaningful poem. Your rhyming couplets are well done. I am sure Roy was pleased with this. One suggestion:
Goliaths forehead--Goliath's needs apostrophe. Have a great day.
Hugs~Debbie
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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This is a very well penned and very meaningful poem. Your rhyming couplets are well done. I am sure Roy was pleased with this. One suggestion:
Goliaths forehead--Goliath's needs apostrophe. Have a great day.
Hugs~Debbie
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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His apostrophe is forthcoming. :-) Thanks for the wonderful award Debbie. Love, Carolyn
Comment from krys123
Carolyn, you did an excellent job in reestablishing this parable of David and Goliath. You made it so intriguing and inspirational that I was stimulated by you words of the Lord's battle between good and evil. Truly when we are small and feel downtrodden with the help of the Lord we will rise against evil. Your writing was excellently done in neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained and your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Carolyn, you did an excellent job in reestablishing this parable of David and Goliath. You made it so intriguing and inspirational that I was stimulated by you words of the Lord's battle between good and evil. Truly when we are small and feel downtrodden with the help of the Lord we will rise against evil. Your writing was excellently done in neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained and your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thanks Alex, I am back to my more 'normal' style of writing. Love, Carolyn
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You are so sincerely welcome and I love your normal style Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
It's a talent to tell a Biblical story in couplets. Shows your versatility. Good use of alliteration and assonance throughout. A neat challenge at the end.
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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It's a talent to tell a Biblical story in couplets. Shows your versatility. Good use of alliteration and assonance throughout. A neat challenge at the end.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Thanks Shari, I appreciate your wonderful comments. Glad you liked it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from reconciled
his father was ashamed of him....they put him out to pasture because of that....we know this because when God sent profits to meet all of his sons....David was not even considered...but the profits knew...and inquired.....God uses us all.....some know they are being used and serve in gratitude...others...do not even realize it.....but usually He uses those "WE" have given up on...or casted in concrete judgement....so we know...WHO...is behind giant size.....imagine a boy disowned by his own.....he ...I believe...started to commune with God at very early age....He was trained by his adopted Father....protecting sheep...day after day...year after year...he was....expert with his weapon of choice.....when he happened upon the stand off ...between his king and the Philistine...he listened and seen ....and was embarrassed for his people enraged.....for his God's honor....notice motivation here....pure love....the king ...and his yes men....thought as much for this runt as his family....and let him...so they believed run to his death.....and the rest is our history.....great read love michael
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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his father was ashamed of him....they put him out to pasture because of that....we know this because when God sent profits to meet all of his sons....David was not even considered...but the profits knew...and inquired.....God uses us all.....some know they are being used and serve in gratitude...others...do not even realize it.....but usually He uses those "WE" have given up on...or casted in concrete judgement....so we know...WHO...is behind giant size.....imagine a boy disowned by his own.....he ...I believe...started to commune with God at very early age....He was trained by his adopted Father....protecting sheep...day after day...year after year...he was....expert with his weapon of choice.....when he happened upon the stand off ...between his king and the Philistine...he listened and seen ....and was embarrassed for his people enraged.....for his God's honor....notice motivation here....pure love....the king ...and his yes men....thought as much for this runt as his family....and let him...so they believed run to his death.....and the rest is our history.....great read love michael
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thanks Michael, it has been interesting to read all the wonderful comments about David and his life. The depth of Gods love for David is extended to us today through His son. I could write about David for several more poems and not exhaust the information. Love, Carolyn
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right....me too. I fell in love with the beauty of poetry reading his psalms... love-
Comment from GE Parson
LUV IT! LUV IT! LUV IT! Great poem about a great man of God.
David is one of my favorite Heroes of the Faith. He was an adulterer and murderer, but God forgave him all. I am guilty of neither but have other sins so I take confidence and assurance of God's forgiveness of all my transgressions.
God bless,
Your Friend,
Jerry
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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LUV IT! LUV IT! LUV IT! Great poem about a great man of God.
David is one of my favorite Heroes of the Faith. He was an adulterer and murderer, but God forgave him all. I am guilty of neither but have other sins so I take confidence and assurance of God's forgiveness of all my transgressions.
God bless,
Your Friend,
Jerry
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thank you Jerry for your enthusiastic and wonderful review of this one. So glad you enjoyed, Dare to be a David. He is a favorite of. Mine as well. Do you save those stars for me? I am very honored. :-) Carolyn
