My Constant Companion
I am having a tough time with this guy20 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I imagine it's your conscience that's driving
you nuts. Dieting is so had and no fun at all.
You captured the battle between knowing what
you are supposed to do and what you want to do
very well.
Great personification. Good rhyme and meter.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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I imagine it's your conscience that's driving
you nuts. Dieting is so had and no fun at all.
You captured the battle between knowing what
you are supposed to do and what you want to do
very well.
Great personification. Good rhyme and meter.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much! I know this will be worth it...but it is not easy...I just want a cookie! Ha
Comment from Rondeno
Good fun, this one. How about "won't hardly fatten", to extend that short line a little? Good jokes, good poem. Conscience is not the most agreeable of companions.
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Good fun, this one. How about "won't hardly fatten", to extend that short line a little? Good jokes, good poem. Conscience is not the most agreeable of companions.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Jacq77
Hahaha... A superb, fun read. Don't we ALL hate dieting! I really enjoyed this humorous write, and could find much to relate to. I didn't know you can get low-fat Brie. I'll have to keep a lookout for it. Well done with this, I hope you do well in the contest.
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Hahaha... A superb, fun read. Don't we ALL hate dieting! I really enjoyed this humorous write, and could find much to relate to. I didn't know you can get low-fat Brie. I'll have to keep a lookout for it. Well done with this, I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Gungalo
I promise to be true to you.
I've cut things down to mini!
But trust me, things are gonna change
when I'm back to feelin' skinny!
You promise? LOL isn't it funny? No one enjoys dieting. LOL but sounds like you have a plan.
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I promise to be true to you.
I've cut things down to mini!
But trust me, things are gonna change
when I'm back to feelin' skinny!
You promise? LOL isn't it funny? No one enjoys dieting. LOL but sounds like you have a plan.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "My Constant Companion". I hate dieting also. I'm been on The Daniel Plan for four weeks. Eating salads and strange things in the recipe book. Some good. Some not! Your poem hit a nerve in my brain. Written very well. My thoughts are different than yours. I'd like to have a companion just for dates. Carole
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To the author of "My Constant Companion". I hate dieting also. I'm been on The Daniel Plan for four weeks. Eating salads and strange things in the recipe book. Some good. Some not! Your poem hit a nerve in my brain. Written very well. My thoughts are different than yours. I'd like to have a companion just for dates. Carole
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
Comment from Patti R.
Argh! Diets!! Not a happy place to be. You've done a really good job personifying the beastly thing. Your rhyme is very good. I got a chuckle out of your last line!
Good luck.
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Argh! Diets!! Not a happy place to be. You've done a really good job personifying the beastly thing. Your rhyme is very good. I got a chuckle out of your last line!
Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
Comment from RYME4U
You are describing going on a diet, Right? This is well done and the presentation is great. I like the rhythm of your words and wish you good luck in the contest.
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You are describing going on a diet, Right? This is well done and the presentation is great. I like the rhythm of your words and wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
Comment from ennahanid
Being a sugar-holic, cheese lover, butter lover, double creamers in coffee and bacon gorger I get this I really do.
This really made me chuckle, I liked the telling and wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
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Being a sugar-holic, cheese lover, butter lover, double creamers in coffee and bacon gorger I get this I really do.
This really made me chuckle, I liked the telling and wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
Comment from Mark Valentine
You've been quite busy. I step away for a few days and come back to a bunch of "New Writing Online" messages. I just started a diet myself so can relate to this. Very creative response to the prompt. Love the tone and the rhymes
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You've been quite busy. I step away for a few days and come back to a bunch of "New Writing Online" messages. I just started a diet myself so can relate to this. Very creative response to the prompt. Love the tone and the rhymes
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with far/jar...mine/dine. Good alliteration with peeked/pudding...jelly/jar...chose/cookie...wonder/why...true/to. Good complimentary photo followed by clear message.
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with far/jar...mine/dine. Good alliteration with peeked/pudding...jelly/jar...chose/cookie...wonder/why...true/to. Good complimentary photo followed by clear message.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014