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home fires

I met this traveler heading home, after a year gone

4 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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I like that the name of Zanzibar and the word sand are in this sme poem. I don't know that you've fully exploited this rhyming opportunity, but I do think that someone will in the near future. I like your poem.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
    Thanks for the review. Lots of sand in Zanzibar
Comment from harmony13
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Excellent poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words were descriptive, creative and thought provoking. The reader pondered on this poem.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    thanks for the review
Comment from kiwisteveh
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I quite liked your senryu which is evocative, but sadly I don't think it is really fulfilling the prompt of praising a person, place or thing - hard to do that I know in 17 syllables.

I especially liked your last line which says a lot in few words.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    thanks for the review
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
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on the horizon
full zanzibar moon home fires LOVE 'zanzibar moon'
sand in your passport Why 'sand'?

Regards:

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    I met a guy in Zanzibar that was heading home after a year of traveling around Africa,(home fires)After all that traveling to beaches,Serengetti, Zanzibar, he actually had sand in his passport. True story, thanks for the review
reply by STEPHEN A CARTER on 17-Feb-2014
    Dear ? poet: A WONDERFUL STORY. Do drop by my site sometime.

    Cheers: Steve C
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    how do you get to someone's site?
reply by STEPHEN A CARTER on 17-Feb-2014
    Dear ?: Look up poet rankings, go down till you find STEPHEN A Carter. Click on the name then click on 'Portfolio' then click on whatever poem interests you. Thanks.

    Cheers: Steve C
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    ok