Comment from
adewpearl
good rhyming couplets though I'd like to see the opening couplet not rhyme with itself
good alliteration in falling flakes
vivid descriptive detail
you capture well the spirit of a snowy winter from the POV of a child
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
Thank you, Brooke, for this encouraging and helpful review.
Comment from
DALLAS01
Nice combination of art work and verse. It is a happy poem.
The only suggestion that I might offer, would be to not compose your end rhymes with the same word or another form.
white/white snowball and ball.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
Thank you for these helpful points,, and your encouragement:)