I Choose Rainbows
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "A Sad Clown"Thoughts from the dark side
4 total reviews
Comment from zeldasmith
This is worthy of a six star rating but I don't have anymore to give out. Excellent at its best. I like how you tied depression to that of the clown. Excellent my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
This is worthy of a six star rating but I don't have anymore to give out. Excellent at its best. I like how you tied depression to that of the clown. Excellent my friend.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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I probably would have fallen over with glee if you had given me 6 stars. It would have been the first time.
Comment from Carrie Carson
Ouch, this is incredibly sad. I always remind self that even clowns have two faces.
No spag, good form. For me, it looks like the "the" is over used, but that's just my opinion. I try to avoid articles in poetry, but again, for emphasis, I can see it's handy.
Good job with this, great photo. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
Ouch, this is incredibly sad. I always remind self that even clowns have two faces.
No spag, good form. For me, it looks like the "the" is over used, but that's just my opinion. I try to avoid articles in poetry, but again, for emphasis, I can see it's handy.
Good job with this, great photo. :) Carrie
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the kind review. I almost didn't post it.
Norm
Comment from Apryle Willis
This is a extremely interesting story to read. I was right in the front row watching and waiting. Thank you for keeping me entertained. Apryle
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
This is a extremely interesting story to read. I was right in the front row watching and waiting. Thank you for keeping me entertained. Apryle
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the review. I am glad you liked it. I didn't know if it would come accross ok.
Norm
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I really enjoyed it a lot. The thing is, everyone cannot appreciate everything. We are all in different places so it will only appeal to some. As is all work. But if you feel the piece, be it liked or be it not, it will be felt by all. Apryle
Comment from Alankrita
wonderful poem. i especially loved the ending. the sad clown as an oxymoron and friends that betray you, somehow this combination works together.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
wonderful poem. i especially loved the ending. the sad clown as an oxymoron and friends that betray you, somehow this combination works together.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the review. I am glad you liked it. I didn't know if it would come accross ok.
Norm