Comment from zeldasmith

Excellent

WOW! Very sensual imagery. Your choice of words were good. It let the reader imagine the scene. Now tell me was it really the Mona Lisa you were speaking of...a dream of sorts....or someone who reminds you of the Mona? Good work poet.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013

Thanks for the nice review. I don't know if I deserved it but am appreciative.

Norm

reply by zeldasmith on 28-Jun-2013

Cheer up kiddo. Don't make excuses for your writing. You are as good a writer as any of us. A poem has to flow nice, layout nice, and follows any form given or not. If too many mis-spelled words or punctuation needs editing a poet will get my 3 or 4 depending how bad the writing is. You passed all my requirements. For a six, which I found out can only be awarded two times a month, a poem has to be exceptional...bringing tears to my eyes, or a lot of laughter....in other words one that should be next to the great poets of our times. So I don't give too many sixes...you deserve the five or I wouldn't have awarded it to you.mkeep writing.

Comment from jameskn

Good

Brings about a physical and mental vivid description,digs hard into the readers understanding capability so as to know what real the gentle moment is,good work

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Christof McTarnahan

Excellent

A very poignant piece, leading the reader from the innocence of the first drink to the horrors of addiction.This is a road traveled by many, I am no exception. It vividly illustrates the love hate relationship one has with their chemical. Use this fire to create instead of destroy.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013

Thanks for the positive review. I don't know if I grabbed the emotiom deep enough to be effective.