Comment from Curt Winslow

Excellent

Well, I am not a huge vampire story lover, but at least this does not seem to idolize them as so many writings and films have. You show them for what they are, spawns of the devil. Great job and keep writing!

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013

Thanks for the comments.

Comment from Nuad1

Good

Wow! Good but needs more flow, tightening between the verses; redundant use of "They" turned this down some for me, too. "Vampires" are a timely topic currently so you chose your subject well.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013

Thanks for the critique.

Comment from Betty Bleen

Excellent

This poem covers all you wanted to know about vampires and then some. I think that it would make a good Halloween poem and would be a good one to read at open mic around that time.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013

Thank you.

Norm

Comment from GracieAnn

Good

This free verse poem has fair and common descriptions of the mythical beings known as vampires. It appeals to a certain genre and people. One thing that may need attention is in the line "In the mind of Satin' (a smooth material) do you mean "Satan"? :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013

Thanks for the critique.

Comment from Rmocruz

Excellent

This is a well constructed verse.
Creating dark colorful imagery.
In my perception you present an
underlying message. The vampires of
which you describe, walk this earth
blatantly in broad daylight.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013

Thanks for the comments Is there a way to improve the poem?

Norm

reply by Rmocruz on 10-Jun-2013

I see nothing lacking in your poetry.
Perhaps you could enhance its appearance
with an appropriate illustration or picture.

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

vampires dead and loveless creatures consumed in their own pleasure as they lust the fragrance of life i enjoyed followin this piece

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013

I like your comment.

Norm

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, sholessjo, you did an excellent job writing this but i don't like the deliberate misspellings. they take away from the poem by making the reader fix them in their mind by reading them in their correct format

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013

Interesting observation that was similar to the critiques of another poem.

Thanks,

Norm