And then there's Grace
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Keep Me"A collection of Spirtual poems
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Comment from Sagnik Das
My dear Carolyn,
En route today to my delightful perusal of some of your illustrious works, whereof I can never commend enough indeed, I abruptly came - & paused at this most "majestic" one ....
Ah! Too overwhelming is this piece for me to comment upon ....
Hence, I truly don't understand as to how I ought to begin ; let me make my impending feeling known this way :
WHAT A POEM ! - or should I say : WHAT AN UNPARALLELED PIECE OF CLASSIC PROFOUNDNESS ! Fraught in sublime touches of "Devout Idealism " , with grand, archaic "Cecil Frances Alexander-styled" stanzas , the choicest mastery of articulate diction, you so wonderfully employ, rings out in vivid clarity - unfolds before the reader's admiring eyes, the unforeseen beauty of a stoic bend of heart, which I presume, you most duly possess.
Besides, I also find it brilliantly rhymed, (in a varied sequence of alternate rhyming schemes) ; & perfectly executed, above all - in every conceivable sense ..... with such gracious poise in terms of cadence and metre , as I have seldom chanced beholding hitherto, save in sundry works of the early 19th century Romanticists.
Indeed, this poem should indubitably bear its hallowed presence in the annals of FS as being " one of the finest of poems ever composed, in any genre " ..... Brilliantly done. Too impeccably have you fared, Madam, to even deem a thousand modest stars ; for even they'll not prove sufficient enough to fathom the priceless worth of your outstanding genius .... You have moved me with your indescribable lines of divine poesy.
Had I been a regular member, I would inevitably have given you a 6 - star rating, without the slightest ado!
But, since that 6-star scale is not available to me as a 'standard member', I am forced for the present, much to my own uncomplacent dismay, to give you a modest five ... Yet, do accept them, knowing them to be a humble token of my heartfelt appreciation; a befitting mark of my fondest appraisal ....
Hence,lending to you my warmest regards and deferential respect, I choose to end here for good! ... Well done, my lady ; unto Thee I humbly bow ! :)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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My dear Carolyn,
En route today to my delightful perusal of some of your illustrious works, whereof I can never commend enough indeed, I abruptly came - & paused at this most "majestic" one ....
Ah! Too overwhelming is this piece for me to comment upon ....
Hence, I truly don't understand as to how I ought to begin ; let me make my impending feeling known this way :
WHAT A POEM ! - or should I say : WHAT AN UNPARALLELED PIECE OF CLASSIC PROFOUNDNESS ! Fraught in sublime touches of "Devout Idealism " , with grand, archaic "Cecil Frances Alexander-styled" stanzas , the choicest mastery of articulate diction, you so wonderfully employ, rings out in vivid clarity - unfolds before the reader's admiring eyes, the unforeseen beauty of a stoic bend of heart, which I presume, you most duly possess.
Besides, I also find it brilliantly rhymed, (in a varied sequence of alternate rhyming schemes) ; & perfectly executed, above all - in every conceivable sense ..... with such gracious poise in terms of cadence and metre , as I have seldom chanced beholding hitherto, save in sundry works of the early 19th century Romanticists.
Indeed, this poem should indubitably bear its hallowed presence in the annals of FS as being " one of the finest of poems ever composed, in any genre " ..... Brilliantly done. Too impeccably have you fared, Madam, to even deem a thousand modest stars ; for even they'll not prove sufficient enough to fathom the priceless worth of your outstanding genius .... You have moved me with your indescribable lines of divine poesy.
Had I been a regular member, I would inevitably have given you a 6 - star rating, without the slightest ado!
But, since that 6-star scale is not available to me as a 'standard member', I am forced for the present, much to my own uncomplacent dismay, to give you a modest five ... Yet, do accept them, knowing them to be a humble token of my heartfelt appreciation; a befitting mark of my fondest appraisal ....
Hence,lending to you my warmest regards and deferential respect, I choose to end here for good! ... Well done, my lady ; unto Thee I humbly bow ! :)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Sagnik, my friend, I am the humbled one. I do write from my grateful heart and so appreciate that you can 'see' me through my work. Variety is essential for my 'silly' personality, my 'motherly' nature, and my 'spiritual' being. You are such a prolific writer yourself ,that your reviews have become an exciting part of my writing process. Thank you so very much. I am glad you enjoyed 'Keep Me'. Please write and post something soon as you have a lot to say. Your friend, Carolyn
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Carolyn, You're indubitably one of a kind .....
Scarcely in my own nation have I ever come across someone as affable, as profound & as sagaciously understanding as your noble self.
You are, in every way an exemplar, not only for me alone; but to humanity at large .
Much thankful to Providence I remain, for allowing me to partake of the gracious acquaintance of such an exalting personality .....
I shall ever remain obliged to you, & upgrade my membership in no time ( had just been waiting all these days for my "perilious" University examinations to end, which, much to my relief they finally will , this July, the 5th ....
And then, ah, its freedom again .... I'll finally breathe, & commune unbridled with you all, who have, by now become for me, a part of my family ...
Just give me a few more days, my friend, & Lo! - I shall be back to you in no time ! :)
Very fondly yours,
Sagnik.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a lovely poem and prayer to God. He is powerful and we ask Him to keep us meek.
You wrote:
All mighty strength, don't let me fail
In UK English: Almighty
Not sure about US English.
Lovely poem.
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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This is a lovely poem and prayer to God. He is powerful and we ask Him to keep us meek.
You wrote:
All mighty strength, don't let me fail
In UK English: Almighty
Not sure about US English.
Lovely poem.
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Thanks for the great review. I think you are right in any English. Isn't it odd what we over look? I am glad you like it Nicole. Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
You feelings of being blessed come through in this poem. Hope and faith too.I like:
When my love for mankind falters
And belief in 'good' grows weak
This captures the quandary we are in today with all the world's strife.
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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You feelings of being blessed come through in this poem. Hope and faith too.I like:
When my love for mankind falters
And belief in 'good' grows weak
This captures the quandary we are in today with all the world's strife.
Comment Written 24-May-2013
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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Thank you Shari for the sweet review. I am glad you liked it. Have a great weekend. Carolyn
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
A really beautiful picture of the Lord caring for His children. Really well done, good rhyme and flow. I see no errors and have no suggestions for improvement as it is good the way it is.
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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A really beautiful picture of the Lord caring for His children. Really well done, good rhyme and flow. I see no errors and have no suggestions for improvement as it is good the way it is.
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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Thank you Roxanne, I appreciate such a wonderful review. Carolyn
Comment from GregoryCody
I Love this. It is beautiful and spiritual. My favorite line is "whirling world with strife and stress". At the end are you talking about going to heaven? It is so wonderfully written and flows great! Fantastic read! I write about my belief as well. I love how many of my brothers and sisters of Christ are here!
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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I Love this. It is beautiful and spiritual. My favorite line is "whirling world with strife and stress". At the end are you talking about going to heaven? It is so wonderfully written and flows great! Fantastic read! I write about my belief as well. I love how many of my brothers and sisters of Christ are here!
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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We do have a great FS site don't we? Thank you so much for this insightful review. Carolyn
Comment from nancyjam
This is a beautiful poem of Faith - a lovely
prayer.
I love the repetition of "Keep Me" which emphasizes
your trust.
Excellent rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Thanks for sharing. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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This is a beautiful poem of Faith - a lovely
prayer.
I love the repetition of "Keep Me" which emphasizes
your trust.
Excellent rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Thanks for sharing. Nancy
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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Hi Nancy, Thank you for the wonderful comments, I am happy you enjoyed the poem. Carolyn
Comment from Chrisann
Lovely prayer, I mean poem, :)! Makes me want to get on my knees and pray with you! But the word, "meek" at the end of the second stanza, brings it to a choppy end. Maybe if you rearranged "contrite, humble and meek" somehow, you'd get a better flow. Blessings!
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Lovely prayer, I mean poem, :)! Makes me want to get on my knees and pray with you! But the word, "meek" at the end of the second stanza, brings it to a choppy end. Maybe if you rearranged "contrite, humble and meek" somehow, you'd get a better flow. Blessings!
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Thank you for such an insightful review. My writing imperfections help to keep me humble and meek. :-) I appreciate all your comments. Carolyn
Comment from kiwijenny
Thanks for this so much. I love it and I need to pray this daily. It is beautiful
I like the picture too the sea is evokes great strength.
I like the last verse best
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Thanks for this so much. I love it and I need to pray this daily. It is beautiful
I like the picture too the sea is evokes great strength.
I like the last verse best
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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What a sweet review, I am glad you liked both picture and poem. Carolyn
Comment from alexgeorge
Absolutely wonderful, Carolyn.
What a beautiful picture you paint with your words.
And there's a message of perseverance for all of us.
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Absolutely wonderful, Carolyn.
What a beautiful picture you paint with your words.
And there's a message of perseverance for all of us.
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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I am happy you got the message of the poem and that you enjoyed it. Best to you always, Carolyn
Comment from MizKat
Carolyn - This is a beautiful poem and worthy of a six star rating. I really enjoyed it a lot from the first word to the last. Kat
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Carolyn - This is a beautiful poem and worthy of a six star rating. I really enjoyed it a lot from the first word to the last. Kat
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Thank you so very much. You are such a 'spiritual' writer, I treasure your comments and rating from my heart. I am blessed that you enjoyed the poem. Carolyn