My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Where I used to be."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from October21
Loved that rule of three at the end there, Jaq! All such wonderful and hopeful words.
The comparisons between the person one used to be and who they are today are well explained throughout the poem. I liked that you wrote the comparisons for both within one stanza.
I think what you're trying to say is that we never realise who we were or how bad life was until we become someone new, make a difference, change our ways. Then we see how things were before, and realise how far we have come since then.
:) xx
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Loved that rule of three at the end there, Jaq! All such wonderful and hopeful words.
The comparisons between the person one used to be and who they are today are well explained throughout the poem. I liked that you wrote the comparisons for both within one stanza.
I think what you're trying to say is that we never realise who we were or how bad life was until we become someone new, make a difference, change our ways. Then we see how things were before, and realise how far we have come since then.
:) xx
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Shenel your insight into this is amasing my wee friend. You've hit the nail on the head once again. Thanks for a brilliant review xx Jaq xx
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:) thank you Jaq, for the lovely reply:) you are most welcome my friend:) xx
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Excellent transformation, Jaq, of your previous doubts and perhaps shy solitude, to a new positive hope and maybe action to give yourself what you deserve - a life as good as the next.
Big-heads and often obnoxious individuals are usually more content and successful than the rest of us.
Chin up, Babes, and FORWARD!
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Excellent transformation, Jaq, of your previous doubts and perhaps shy solitude, to a new positive hope and maybe action to give yourself what you deserve - a life as good as the next.
Big-heads and often obnoxious individuals are usually more content and successful than the rest of us.
Chin up, Babes, and FORWARD!
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for this great review my wee mate :). Onwards and upwards ;-) Jaq xx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend concentrate where you are now my friend if that id where you are happiest well done on this write regards Jill
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend concentrate where you are now my friend if that id where you are happiest well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Jill, I have to, I've allowed the past to drag me down for too long. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Indie Skreet
well done with this one Jaq - I see that fighting spirit which I knew was there and don't stop Hun .......glad you have discovered you are better than that :) luv ya, Indie xx
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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well done with this one Jaq - I see that fighting spirit which I knew was there and don't stop Hun .......glad you have discovered you are better than that :) luv ya, Indie xx
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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love ya too Indie thanks so much xx
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Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
Ah I see by the way you write you have learned to flirt well and yes you are very good at it You shine girl you are that peeking star that shines at night when all the others are covered by a cloud your brightness flows through !! TK
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Ah I see by the way you write you have learned to flirt well and yes you are very good at it You shine girl you are that peeking star that shines at night when all the others are covered by a cloud your brightness flows through !! TK
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Aww thanks so much TK. Flirt? Moi? Surely not ;-) lol xx
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YEA AND I'M SHY HEHEHE
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Lol, yea I guessed that :) xx
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AND I'M KINDA CUTE TOO HEHEHEHE WELL NOT BAD FOR AN OLD PIRATE ANYWAY
CAPT T
Comment from 4hisglory
I think this is a process that takes a life time, finding out just who we are, who God make us to be. But, each step of the way we are more free to be who we really are.
I like your poem. It has good flow and good rhyme and a good message. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings, LaVonne
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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I think this is a process that takes a life time, finding out just who we are, who God make us to be. But, each step of the way we are more free to be who we really are.
I like your poem. It has good flow and good rhyme and a good message. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings, LaVonne
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review LaVonne, :) Jaq x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Jaq, this a wonderful flowing work on get rid of before and accepting new.
Great imagery, sense of guidance- your wisdom showcased well in each stanza.
Thanks for sharing this one.I enjoyed it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Hi Jaq, this a wonderful flowing work on get rid of before and accepting new.
Great imagery, sense of guidance- your wisdom showcased well in each stanza.
Thanks for sharing this one.I enjoyed it.
Maureen
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much Maureen, I think it's time to say 'out with the old and in with the new'. I'm glad you enjoyed and thanks for reviewing. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Jaq Cee,
Your poem is well-written and thought provoking. Our lives are what we make of them. We can't change many things in life, but we can change how we think about them and how we react to them. Life can and occasionally does knock me on my a**, but only I can decide to get up or not...in other words, life can knock me down, but on I can keep me down. Thanks for sharing this thought- provoking piece.
Curtis
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Jaq Cee,
Your poem is well-written and thought provoking. Our lives are what we make of them. We can't change many things in life, but we can change how we think about them and how we react to them. Life can and occasionally does knock me on my a**, but only I can decide to get up or not...in other words, life can knock me down, but on I can keep me down. Thanks for sharing this thought- provoking piece.
Curtis
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much Curtis and you are right, if we choose to rise or stay down after a fall is up to us. You review is much appreciated. :) Jaq x
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets
I love the contrast of used to be and I see me
strong verb choices add to the power of your poem
You deliver a most thoughtful message in a creative way
Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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solid rhyming couplets
I love the contrast of used to be and I see me
strong verb choices add to the power of your poem
You deliver a most thoughtful message in a creative way
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks Brooke it's lovely to have your thoughts and review on this poem. :) Jaq xx
Comment from muezza56
i really enjoyed this positive upbeat well written poem, the writer is now in a happier place which is reflected in the poem. cleverly chosen accompanying pic
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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i really enjoyed this positive upbeat well written poem, the writer is now in a happier place which is reflected in the poem. cleverly chosen accompanying pic
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely review muezza56 :) Jaq x