Comment from GarthL

Excellent

All these latest writes are definitely going to invoke a response in your life Jaq I'd think! You'll have them lining up around the block to audition for the role:-) Beautifully presented and very enticing and a great song to compliment it all. StaySafe, Garth

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013

Lol Garth we shall see. It's nice to be able to lighten up a bit. :) Jaq xx

reply by GarthL on 23-Mar-2013

Cheers mate!!!xox

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

This is very well written my friend exactly how I feel about Erick at this time I enjoyed you have expressed your feelings strongly well done I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013

I'm glad you and Erick have this between you. Glad you enjoyed it means a lot :) Jaq xx

Comment from October21

Excellent

Jaq... you just write the most amazing love poems... it's always rare when we know from the early days that it's meant to be... these are the times that it lasts forever... beautiful poem, so sweet:-( Loved that repeated stanza...:(

That's one of my favourite songs, always makes me cry:-(

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013

Thanks Shenel, as always it's great to hear from you :) Jaq xx

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

gee, one lucky fellah for sure. this was perfect and flowed easily. Clearly came from the heart and lay out is perfect too. Looking forward to hearing more of the awakened dormant lust :) warmly Indie xx

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013

Lol Indie you will be the first to know xxx

reply by Indie Skreet on 22-Mar-2013

coolio ;)

Comment from Cariboubill

Excellent

Ther's a lot of strong emotion in this poem. It is expressed very well. It's been years since I felt like this, but this poem brings it back to me. Good work.
...Bill

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013

Thank you so much Bill it's much appreciated :) Jaq xx

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

What a perfect expression of a woman's love! It gives, in lyrical language perfectly apt for the purpose, a strong hint of eroticism, enshrined in romantic love. Delightful!

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013

I'm so glad you enjoyed it Meehal. It's from the heart. :) Jaq xx

Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Excellent

Wow again you have captured my imagination and made my passion flow You do that very well as you know So again you have been awarded This Tanished Knights award for excellence complete with a tarnished picture lol
This was grrrreat all the words the picture and the song
KUDOS
TK
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 Comment Written 22-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013

Thanks once again TK, you are a star. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi Jaq, well now I need a cold shower - what are you doing girl:D A lovely poem filled with love's power throughout.
I liked it - great job at creating the moment within your lines. You made it real to me as I read it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013

Thanks Maureen, just came to me tonight and tried to let it flow naturally. Your review is much appreciated. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

I will watch your eyes as our
passion climaxes--
loudly
sweetly
intensely
then I will watch as you slumber
sated, loved, spent,
in our own
universe

we will be perfect
you and
I

This I know--

You should take all of the above out of your poem girl. It's better to let it be said quietly and beneath the scenes than to have to much in there.

You've done a great job with your free verse in this write. How wonderful, eh?

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013

Cheers Gungalo I know what you're saying, less is sometimes more indeed. I've removed some of it. Thanks for the pointers girlie, much appreciated. I'm getting there I hope. :) xxx

reply by Gungalo on 22-Mar-2013

Good girl. Better.