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My Life in words

Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Stay with me."
All of my poems of release.

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Comment from reconciled
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Exceptional flow....it dances with life....its probably the most important thing....flow....not just in poetry -smile- Alright great read love Michael

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
    Thank you so much Michael, flow is indeed an important part of who were are and what we do ;-) much hugs Jaq xxxx
Comment from October21
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Beautiful words in this wonderful poem, as always, "always" reminding me of this kind of love. I guess the best inspiration comes at weird and random times... Even in the middle of the night... Hehe:-)

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Lol, thanks Shenel it certainly does :) xxx
Comment from Gungalo
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We meet in my dreams
to join as one,
stay with me; play with me;
the ride's just begun.


To meet one's sweetheart in your dreams will portend what is to come. I hope you find one that is not of dreams girlie. Great quatrains.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Thanks Gungalo much appreciated review :) Jaq xx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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This is very well written my friend so much passion in this poem full of feeling and imagery bringing it to life well done I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Thank you so muck Jill is is always a pleasure to hear your thoughts my friend :) Jaq xx
Comment from Galactia
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beautiful and fun filled love poem you have created.

Favourite stanza...

want you; I need you;
I'm filled with desire,
take me; fulfill me;
please quench my fire.

great job

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Thank you so much Tia xx
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
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As long as you write these beautiful sensuous words stay awake will yea ..this was a very good as I said before I have move over you you have taken my romantic spot and I bow to you lol !!
tk

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Lol Knight I think not. Still at work but look forward to trawling through your work later :) Jaq x
reply by A TARNISHED KNIGHT on 20-Mar-2013
    TRAWLING HEHE YOU ARE ONE CREATIVE VERBAL PAINTER THATS FOR SURE LOVE IT !!!
    TK
reply by A TARNISHED KNIGHT on 20-Mar-2013
    ITS 5 AM HERE SO FORGIVE MY TYPING DYSLEXIA
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Lol catch up later :) Jaq x
Comment from Rondeno
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Rhythm and rhyme - faultless. However, this is much more. It's a poem which captures beautifully the moment when a woman commits herself to a man. Very romantic.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Glad you appreciate it Meehal, as always I value your opinion. :) Jacqueline xx
reply by Rondeno on 20-Mar-2013
    you've gone in for trochees this time
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    That's just what I was aiming for ;-) xxxx
Comment from GarthL
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Those hormones are working overtime Jaq, if any young fellow could resist such a temptation he would have no blood in his veins. You might lack sleep at the moment but if that gets out you might not get any sleep at all. Very hot, beautifully presented and lyrically seductive and enticing.
Get ready for the action!! Garth

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Lmao thanks Garth at least insomnia isn't a total waste :) Jaq xx
reply by GarthL on 20-Mar-2013
    Cheers Jaq!!!
Comment from visionary1234
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Tssss! a real hottie here, hmm? No wonder you're waking up in the middle of the night dear! meter a little bumpy here and there ... but a nice write! :)Sharyn

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Thanks so much Sharyn, I haven't mastered meter as yet. :) Jaq xxx
reply by visionary1234 on 20-Mar-2013
    it's pretty easy Jackie ... just listen to how you speak, with stressed and unstressed syllables (a dictionary breaks down each word for you if you need to get the hang of it first) - then try a simple iambic and just go from there. :)Sharyn
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Thanks so much Sharyn :) Jaq xx
Comment from Walu Feral
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Crikey Jaq! I liked this saucey little number. My wife should be home from work soon, and she could be in trouble.You made me want a cuddle, LOL. Cheers Fez.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
    Lmao all part of the service Fez ;-) Thanks xxx Jaq