All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Let Me Blaze, in Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
38 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I really enjoyed your Kyrielle.
the rhyme and meter are well done
and the repeating line is beautiful.
the speaker wishes to let go of a life
of pain and reach heaven..."to seek the light
and sing stars' song.
Beautiful.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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I really enjoyed your Kyrielle.
the rhyme and meter are well done
and the repeating line is beautiful.
the speaker wishes to let go of a life
of pain and reach heaven..."to seek the light
and sing stars' song.
Beautiful.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Glad you found this one Nancy - seeks to be the season for kyrielles, hmm? glad you enjoyed this one too! :)Sharyn
Comment from Glasstruth
Sad, but beautiful in the way that it's written. Great alliteration, "And let me blaze, in blue, tonight
To seek the light, and sing stars' song" Also you show the age of the person in "feathered, quav'ring voice" Yet, the true personality of iron-will is deep within. Great stuff!!! Les
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Sad, but beautiful in the way that it's written. Great alliteration, "And let me blaze, in blue, tonight
To seek the light, and sing stars' song" Also you show the age of the person in "feathered, quav'ring voice" Yet, the true personality of iron-will is deep within. Great stuff!!! Les
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Bless you, Les! :)S
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Sharyn, this is a beauty, like you. I hope it is not about you right now but when you get old like some of us. Any way, it is a keeper. I thoroughly enjoyed the read and would like a copy of it. But, I am away from home and printer. You are a great writer and I am proud that you are my friend. Your admirer, Bob
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Sharyn, this is a beauty, like you. I hope it is not about you right now but when you get old like some of us. Any way, it is a keeper. I thoroughly enjoyed the read and would like a copy of it. But, I am away from home and printer. You are a great writer and I am proud that you are my friend. Your admirer, Bob
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Not about me, Bob, I'm happy to say. No, I wrote this one for both my mother (82) and my mother-in-law (95). My mother is still hale and hearty, but becoming frail and I can hear her losing her words. My mother-in-law has always been a pistol, but I can see and her her growing tired. I know you know exactly what I mean, and I thank you so much for loving this piece and, of course, for your wonderful 'six'!
Blessings and many thanks my dear friend!
Sharyn
Comment from Brumar97
Enjoyable. Your word choice is very picturesque yet closely connected to emotion as well. The words exude the wisdom of age and spirituality. Good job:)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Enjoyable. Your word choice is very picturesque yet closely connected to emotion as well. The words exude the wisdom of age and spirituality. Good job:)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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thx Brumar - bless you - hopefully with age comes spirituality - otherwise the picture is not a happy one! :)S
Comment from robina1978
A catching title and a matching beautiful general layout. I have never seen one where all the last lines were repeated but it is allowed. And it possibly is the strongest line.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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A catching title and a matching beautiful general layout. I have never seen one where all the last lines were repeated but it is allowed. And it possibly is the strongest line.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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thx so much Ine - that's the general idea of a kyrielle - see rules in author's notes :)S
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welcome, yes, I read them.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Nice kyrielle, Sharyn. I tried one of these once and found it quite difficult. I do like the message in this, that we go to the light, we go home.
Lots of depth, and very thought provoking.
Av
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Nice kyrielle, Sharyn. I tried one of these once and found it quite difficult. I do like the message in this, that we go to the light, we go home.
Lots of depth, and very thought provoking.
Av
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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not so hard, Av - challenge is in finding one REALLY good line to be the repeating one :)S
Comment from Jendowoz
Wow a thought-provoking poem, Sharyn. I hope this is a fictional character and not you, my friend. It sounds like a person with significant health issues. Very moving.
regards, Jen
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Wow a thought-provoking poem, Sharyn. I hope this is a fictional character and not you, my friend. It sounds like a person with significant health issues. Very moving.
regards, Jen
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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I wrote this one with my mother in mind, Jen - also my husband's mother who is 95 and getting tired of living, but still full of "life" - it's hard to watch. thanks so much for reviewing, as always! :)Sharyn
Comment from JM daSilva
I thought about the fact that we are made of stardust and that one day will go back to the stars. From a star born, to a star will go back. From dust to dust. Nice poem as always.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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I thought about the fact that we are made of stardust and that one day will go back to the stars. From a star born, to a star will go back. From dust to dust. Nice poem as always.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thx JM = I must have written up a storm yesterday, hmm? I like that kyrielle form. :)S
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Me too.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
this had one of those melodic verses that made it easy to just flow it down the page to the end. Your repeated line was a snorter
'To seek the light,and sing star's song' absolutely beautiful, when I go I want it to be just like this.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
******stars!!!!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
this had one of those melodic verses that made it easy to just flow it down the page to the end. Your repeated line was a snorter
'To seek the light,and sing star's song' absolutely beautiful, when I go I want it to be just like this.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
******stars!!!!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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I think we ALL want to go like this James, yes? :)))
Comment from fairy77
That's beautiful Sharyn. I really enjoyed this happy piece.Best one I read all day dear!I loved sing stars and its beautiful display!Share your joy!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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That's beautiful Sharyn. I really enjoyed this happy piece.Best one I read all day dear!I loved sing stars and its beautiful display!Share your joy!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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high praise indeed Beth! Delighted! :)Sharyn