Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. Betrayal struck his heart. It is a modern way to get even. You didn't want credit for the revenge. Good, because that is what usually catches the person. Great work.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading and for the great review. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from Itdoesntmatter

Good

Hope that wasn't non-fiction, anyway I saw some weak words being used that wasn't needed, ex: had. Plus spag problems. Get someone to edit and the short might be a better read. Sure hope it's non-fiction lol.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013

Thanks for the review. I know thete are some issues. With my anti-social eork shift pattern I sometimes need to rush things. I'm going to re edit. Thanks for the review.

reply by Itdoesntmatter on 18-Mar-2013

No problem, I would like to be notified when you do. Like to see it in its full glory.

Comment from ndadarose

Excellent

This is an excellent story of revenge. I was captivated from the beginning. In the very first line did you mean to use the word finish?

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading and reviewing. Finish at tha start is something we say in the UK. I'm glad you liked it.