All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "In Velvet Dark"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
87 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
This wasgreat I loved the black and white photo It truly set the mood. youir word were like magic the movent would put any one in the mood...... to dance
thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
  |
This wasgreat I loved the black and white photo It truly set the mood. youir word were like magic the movent would put any one in the mood...... to dance
thank you for sharing
Comment Written 18-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
-
ooooh I was hoping you'd see this one misscookie! thank you SO much for your lovely sixer on this one - it was great fun to write! :)Sharyn
-
Why were you hoping I read this one iF YOU DON'T MIND ME ASKING?.
Your very welcome and you did a greAT JOB.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Congrats on the win - well-deserved!
Much more regular rhythm and rhyme than your usual free verse and certainly hits the passionate button.
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
 |
Congrats on the win - well-deserved!
Much more regular rhythm and rhyme than your usual free verse and certainly hits the passionate button.
Steve
Comment Written 18-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
-
thx so much Steve - I had fun with this one - don't know why it came out more "regular" - at 11pm who KNOWS what goes on in one's head, hmm? Blessings,S
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Aloha Honey! Yeah you get a honey out of me for this beauty! I know exactly why this fabulous piece of work won. You have created a va va va boom piece of love me good time...have I used enough colloquialisms for you...lol...love it my friend this is amazing. Well done! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
|
Aloha Honey! Yeah you get a honey out of me for this beauty! I know exactly why this fabulous piece of work won. You have created a va va va boom piece of love me good time...have I used enough colloquialisms for you...lol...love it my friend this is amazing. Well done! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 18-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
-
well thx so much kiwi! yeah! got it! glad to have you on the dance-floor, my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from guinea
This is indeed well written my friend. The imagery is great. The words flow smoothly and with emotion and passion. A wonderful poem here to read.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
|
This is indeed well written my friend. The imagery is great. The words flow smoothly and with emotion and passion. A wonderful poem here to read.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
-
thx so much guinea! :)Sharyn
Comment from Fish
Not to be unseemly or grotesque, but the
perspective seemed to be one of being
in heat and horny as hell. LOL
I liked your poem. Grats on the win!
Fish
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
|
Not to be unseemly or grotesque, but the
perspective seemed to be one of being
in heat and horny as hell. LOL
I liked your poem. Grats on the win!
Fish
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
-
well yes, fish ... but hopefully more subtle than that, dear one! :)Sharyn
Comment from jjstar
Simply spectacular poem. Almost a story in and of itself. Congratulations on the win. So well deserved. I'm just breathless and can't think of a thing to say, except...BRILLIANT!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
|
Simply spectacular poem. Almost a story in and of itself. Congratulations on the win. So well deserved. I'm just breathless and can't think of a thing to say, except...BRILLIANT!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
-
You're gorgeous! Thank you SO much for that lovely sixer jj - I'm always delighted when someone really "gets" one of my pieces! blessings!
Sharyn
-
Your writing is just amazing!
-
I'm blushing! :))))
Comment from K.W.
Woo Hoo! :) Congratulations on your well deserved win! This is smokin'- tastefully so;) your language is heated and sensual. love this! very best, k
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
|
Woo Hoo! :) Congratulations on your well deserved win! This is smokin'- tastefully so;) your language is heated and sensual. love this! very best, k
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
-
thx so much k - I had fun writing this one! :)))
-
ahem.... you don't say;) (insert bawdy wink).
again, congratulations!
Comment from Crystal Carey
It was passionate, I prefer to end my love poetry with poison myself.. :p This is a great piece very flowy and a joy to read. I loved how you made it black and white for the contest LOL!!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
|
It was passionate, I prefer to end my love poetry with poison myself.. :p This is a great piece very flowy and a joy to read. I loved how you made it black and white for the contest LOL!!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
-
thx CC - poison, hmm? a drama queen, perhaps??? :))))
-
Secret thoughts that you cannot act on!! :D
Comment from Harper J
Enchanting poem about being in a special place during a forbidden dance with that special some one. This poem is seductive but not cheap, it portrays a wanting urge for the dance and how the other dancer is able to lead her to a place of no return
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
|
Enchanting poem about being in a special place during a forbidden dance with that special some one. This poem is seductive but not cheap, it portrays a wanting urge for the dance and how the other dancer is able to lead her to a place of no return
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
-
thank you for enjoying the subtlety of this one my dear! :)S
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Sharyn
Congratulations on taking the Blue in the
contest with the sensuous piece. I can see
why it won.
I like the poem's use of the dance as the
metaphor for love. It sets a perfect tone
for the poem's development. The ending
is both creative and seductive.
Well done!
Ray
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
|
Good Evening, Sharyn
Congratulations on taking the Blue in the
contest with the sensuous piece. I can see
why it won.
I like the poem's use of the dance as the
metaphor for love. It sets a perfect tone
for the poem's development. The ending
is both creative and seductive.
Well done!
Ray
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
-
thx so much Ray! I enjoyed writing this one ;)S