And then there's Grace
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Heavens Door"A collection of Spirtual poems
16 total reviews
Comment from kentuckywoman53
Great rhyming, flow, and such a strong message about abuse are all contained in the excellent writing. Your words go straight to the heart and brings a visual to the mind. I feel fortunate to have the opportunity to read the emotions and thoughts you transfer from your mind onto the paper. Continued success.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Great rhyming, flow, and such a strong message about abuse are all contained in the excellent writing. Your words go straight to the heart and brings a visual to the mind. I feel fortunate to have the opportunity to read the emotions and thoughts you transfer from your mind onto the paper. Continued success.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful comments on Heavens Door. Little children ought to know nothing but love, tenderness and security, which, Thank the Lord they will have with Him. Carolyn
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You are very welcome Carolyn. I was gonna write more, but am too choked up to do that.
Hugssssssssssssssssssssssssss
Comment from Curt Mongold
The message of abuse, way too much abuse is very plain and painfully poignant to the reader. May I suggest you re-format the piece to read with the rhymes? I believe it would help carry the message much better to the reader.
Best wishes,
Curt
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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The message of abuse, way too much abuse is very plain and painfully poignant to the reader. May I suggest you re-format the piece to read with the rhymes? I believe it would help carry the message much better to the reader.
Best wishes,
Curt
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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Thanks Curt for your review, The last half of the poem, mostly a combination of free verse and rhyme is a summation of the short life of abuse, to endless joy and peace. I appreciate your comments very much. Carolyn
Comment from PoeticXscape
The line Bruise on cheek from hand's hard blow seems out of place because it doesn't match the rhyme pattern. It was a good line but shame it didn't fit.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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The line Bruise on cheek from hand's hard blow seems out of place because it doesn't match the rhyme pattern. It was a good line but shame it didn't fit.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2013
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Thanks for your honest review. I appreciate your comments, Carolyn
Comment from ravenblack
for this poem to truly work, I really feel that a more specific sense of the person or situation or even of the abuser is needed. w/out such specifics, it reads like a generic news story/ social commentary. also, be careful w/your words. 1st stanza, 5th line - to should be too.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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for this poem to truly work, I really feel that a more specific sense of the person or situation or even of the abuser is needed. w/out such specifics, it reads like a generic news story/ social commentary. also, be careful w/your words. 1st stanza, 5th line - to should be too.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your honest review and the edit. You are appreciated. Carolyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written my friend a stark reminder as what can happen when abuse takes a life it is true that heaven will take away all pain it is a high price to pay well done on writing about this hard subject regards Jill
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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This is very well written my friend a stark reminder as what can happen when abuse takes a life it is true that heaven will take away all pain it is a high price to pay well done on writing about this hard subject regards Jill
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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Yes it was a hard and troubling subject, the daily news tells us so often of these little children it makes my heart break. God is good. Best regards, Carolyn
Comment from charlyann
Heartbreaking to read. Very well written with a solid structure an easy flow and some great rhymes...so sad..I love the honesty of writing...good job
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Heartbreaking to read. Very well written with a solid structure an easy flow and some great rhymes...so sad..I love the honesty of writing...good job
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the comments and I am glad you liked it. Thank God Heaven awaits. Carolyn
Comment from dancerwriter
I do hope this was not one of your experiences in life, bu t
obviously you know of this brutality.Such a beautiful story filled with terrible abuse and so many wonderful feelings expressed. How sad for this young person who has to live with this horrid life. Your words made me feel this so emotionally, I almost cried myself.Lesley.J.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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I do hope this was not one of your experiences in life, bu t
obviously you know of this brutality.Such a beautiful story filled with terrible abuse and so many wonderful feelings expressed. How sad for this young person who has to live with this horrid life. Your words made me feel this so emotionally, I almost cried myself.Lesley.J.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Actually almost daily news prompted this poem. It is so common to hear of a child being killed by a relative or a jealous boyfriend. The only consolation is that Heaven awaits, It was a troubling poem to write but I had to. I am sure you know that feeling of urgency. And I am thankful that the story did not come from a personal experience nor anyone I knew. Thank you Leslie, I hope you are having a good day. Carolyn
Comment from October21
Child abuse is something that happens often and very horrid to hear about it. But it's beautiful to think that once that person is in heaven they won't have to remember that life anymore and can continue blissfully. That's a wonderful thought. Nice thinking in this intriguing poem my friend!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Child abuse is something that happens often and very horrid to hear about it. But it's beautiful to think that once that person is in heaven they won't have to remember that life anymore and can continue blissfully. That's a wonderful thought. Nice thinking in this intriguing poem my friend!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Thank you for you comments. This was a troubled poem to write. The news is rarely free from stories such as this. Heaven waits, Carolyn
Comment from Gungalo
She will never remember the life before
Once she enters
Heavens door.
You are right. She'll not remember them anymore for they don't exist. Only goodness and mercy.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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She will never remember the life before
Once she enters
Heavens door.
You are right. She'll not remember them anymore for they don't exist. Only goodness and mercy.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Thanks for the review, The news is rarely free from stories such as this. Thank God for a forever place. Carolyn
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Comment from dmt1967
This is a very sad poem the child going to heaven as she was murdered I take it very sad its sad but an everyday occurrence unfortunately thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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This is a very sad poem the child going to heaven as she was murdered I take it very sad its sad but an everyday occurrence unfortunately thank you for sharing
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Yes it is sad. It troubled me to write this poem. The news is rarely free of stories such as this. Thank you for reading and reviewing. Carolyn