Comment from GarthL

Excellent

Covered the criteria well Jaq. I could definitely hear it with crashes, scratches, scrapes, squeaks and creaks. Well done. Great splashes of alliteration. I loved the old farmhouse and its symphony. Good luck in the contest and the new year ahead, already one month old. StaySafe, Garth

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013

Contest well and truly over, I didn't get one single vote. C'est la vie, yet still I try. Thanks for reading and reviewing Garth. When I get home tonight I will see if I have a spare hour and get to work on reviewing your poems :) Jaq x

reply by GarthL on 29-Jan-2013

Sorry to hear that Jaq, I enjoyed a lot thank you. Staystrong, Garth

Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. The world can still make a lot of noise even with out a living thing around.I like to think of it as the old farm dying. It was the people and the animals that kept this farm house alive. Great work.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013

Thank you elliejean x

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

This is a great entry. Really love all of the clever alliteration. Also like your last couplet, ending your crescendo on a melodious note.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013

Thank you so much for your kind words x

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

The cacophony of sounds is well done here. The picture enhances your descriptive words. The alliteration is nicely executed as well.You have done a great job here.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013

Thanks for a great review x

Comment from pattipac

Excellent

Your well penned Cacophony poem is filled with disturbing, harsh and jarring sounds. You paint a picture with your alliteration and rhyme. Your return to the long abandoned family does play like a thundering symphony.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2013

I'm glad you liked it, thanks for stopping by x

Comment from seewhatimwritingnow

Good

Enjoyed reading this. Old houses do come with their noises don't they? I do believe the poem is supposed to rhyme though? See no rhyming here. Still, a good writing.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013

Thank you so much for your review x

reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013

I didn't see anywhere that it said it had to rhyme :(

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

This is an excellent little Cacophony Poem you have composed. Ican see the metal bin crashing and the banging gates.

great job and GL

regards
Tia

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013

Thank you so very much Tia :) Jaq xx

Comment from L. Sherman

Excellent

A nice job with this poem and a good use of Cacophony. Love the words like 'scrape' 'clash' 'clatter' and 'smash' 'bang'

Very nice job.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013

Thanks for a great review. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

Great job using your multi-sensory imagery and sound. This looks like an excellent entry, although I haven't read the others yet. Thanks for sharing. T2

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013

Thanks Terror2s much appreciated. :) Jaq xx