All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Bites of Delight"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You have interesting internal rhyming here and in your story you could be talking about me! The day we wake up to the fact that those days are long behind us is a startling one. Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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You have interesting internal rhyming here and in your story you could be talking about me! The day we wake up to the fact that those days are long behind us is a startling one. Giddy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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You've got that right, Giddy! :) Sharyn
Comment from MelReyn
I liked the comparison of life to food. I liked the idea of the young being indiscriminate, eating as much as they can, while the older and wiser mom, took small bites. Quality vs quantity.
This makes me think of the advice I hear everywhere I go (when I have my kids with me) "Enjoy them, life flies by fast and before you know it they'll be grown!" Great work!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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I liked the comparison of life to food. I liked the idea of the young being indiscriminate, eating as much as they can, while the older and wiser mom, took small bites. Quality vs quantity.
This makes me think of the advice I hear everywhere I go (when I have my kids with me) "Enjoy them, life flies by fast and before you know it they'll be grown!" Great work!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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Thx so much Mel! :) Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
Does this bring memories! I remember my mother saying she never thought she would long enough to see me look middle age. Ouch,Mom! Love your description of the son:
big enough to eat you for breakfast/ eternally hungry...
You extol the virtues of growing older--savoring the small things in life. Finally stopping to smell the roses, to use a cliche. Good luck in the contest, Sharyn.
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Does this bring memories! I remember my mother saying she never thought she would long enough to see me look middle age. Ouch,Mom! Love your description of the son:
big enough to eat you for breakfast/ eternally hungry...
You extol the virtues of growing older--savoring the small things in life. Finally stopping to smell the roses, to use a cliche. Good luck in the contest, Sharyn.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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thx spits - didn't win this one, but enjoyed the small bites of chocolate over Christmas ... my special treat!
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
And such a lovely and revealing conversation with one's self. A beautiful walk through a mind and spirit that has come to recognize and understand the positives of growing older... able to know there are negatives but still not outweighed by the positives...
This speaks so eloquently of the path of coming to be One...
Just a little tattered... just a little... and still a sparkling jewel with a visionary gift... worth sharing
greg
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And such a lovely and revealing conversation with one's self. A beautiful walk through a mind and spirit that has come to recognize and understand the positives of growing older... able to know there are negatives but still not outweighed by the positives...
This speaks so eloquently of the path of coming to be One...
Just a little tattered... just a little... and still a sparkling jewel with a visionary gift... worth sharing
greg
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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thx so much greg - yep - catch myself chatting away to myself all the time (and occasionally making sense!)
big hugs
Sharyn
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Hi Sharyn... I try to avoid chatting with myself... usually ends in an argument... he's such a don't-know-it-all
love the hugs
greg
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and mine's such a bag!
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I used to hate my mirror. Now I am just glad someone iooks back, LOL. I have certainly grown more appreciative of the small things. Very good poem!!! Debbie
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I used to hate my mirror. Now I am just glad someone iooks back, LOL. I have certainly grown more appreciative of the small things. Very good poem!!! Debbie
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013
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thx so much Debbie! :) Sharyn
Comment from MumEsGirl
Well done on such a fun write. I avoid mirrors like the plague. When I do catch a glimpse of myself, I look like a deranged hedgehog.
I am happy to see that I am not the only person who can see the fun side of getting older
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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Well done on such a fun write. I avoid mirrors like the plague. When I do catch a glimpse of myself, I look like a deranged hedgehog.
I am happy to see that I am not the only person who can see the fun side of getting older
hugs
kate
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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thx Kate! :)
Comment from Starlit Ink
Yes, growing older does have some compensations, and that's a positive way to look at it (especially with a new year starting). I like your references to small treasures, "angel-wing clouds" was lovely. Good luck with your entry. It was a bite of delight to read it.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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Yes, growing older does have some compensations, and that's a positive way to look at it (especially with a new year starting). I like your references to small treasures, "angel-wing clouds" was lovely. Good luck with your entry. It was a bite of delight to read it.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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thx so much Starlit! :) Sharyn
Comment from 9999pool
"Growing older has some compensations, yes?" The answer is yes, LOL. The returns are higher now..there will be daughters and sons in laws. Sons and daughters in law. Plus the babies and the grandchildren. Of course Christmas becomes nosier too. Best of all, we have time to reflect on ourselves, where we have been, what became of us and how it had all happened. The good and the bad but it is still a "Life to Behold" (LOL, my latest posting). Now we have the time to savor the creaminess in the creams and have time to count the wrinkles but I do not recommend counting the hair loss, LOL. Great writing with a pattern formation of the stanzas looking like a lady with a fat tummy (LOL). The expressions are simple and punchy. Great works of art on how to taste the life still flourishing in us. Good luck in the writing prompt. If you win, please post this review..cheeky as usual. LOL. Cheers, Ritchiesszzky.
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"Growing older has some compensations, yes?" The answer is yes, LOL. The returns are higher now..there will be daughters and sons in laws. Sons and daughters in law. Plus the babies and the grandchildren. Of course Christmas becomes nosier too. Best of all, we have time to reflect on ourselves, where we have been, what became of us and how it had all happened. The good and the bad but it is still a "Life to Behold" (LOL, my latest posting). Now we have the time to savor the creaminess in the creams and have time to count the wrinkles but I do not recommend counting the hair loss, LOL. Great writing with a pattern formation of the stanzas looking like a lady with a fat tummy (LOL). The expressions are simple and punchy. Great works of art on how to taste the life still flourishing in us. Good luck in the writing prompt. If you win, please post this review..cheeky as usual. LOL. Cheers, Ritchiesszzky.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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naughty Richie - and didn't win, but enjoyed the write! :) S
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Thx for the compliments. I like the poem especially if an elderly person reads it. I mean growing old gracefully meant enough time to look at life passing by slowly.
My comment on writing prompt is that the total vote count is so small that a mere 10 votes can declare one a winner (you know I am the spoiled spot, LOL). I will campaign the 10 votes for you if you hire me as your prompt promotion big time manager, haha.
Anyway I know you are here for the fun, irrespective. No worries, with a little bit of brain washed ,we can garnered more votes ( I meant you please write better next time, LOLz). Cheers, more cheeky now.
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yes, it always surprises me that more people don't vote ... sort of parallels our country, doesn't it dear?
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So true. If I said more, 'they ' will ban me for sure, LOL. The parallels in my country Malaysia (in South East Asia, LOL) is far worse than in your country - we don't know who to vote anymore, LOL. If I have 2 votes I will give one each, just to create more chaos. By that I mean chaos can bring a country together again like Storm Sandy or Newtown. Bad events I agreed. Shadows as in light helps shape our characters, LOL. Wonder why I always like to write about the shadows. Btw, you might want to read about the horrifying shadows in "Imaginary Friend" by 'cinamonsunrise' - a far departure from the norm of poems (money back guarantee meaning 10 free reviews on your poems from Ritchiesszky). Odds are high, LOL. Cheers.
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aah - good - I'll take a look - thx for the recommendation Ritchie. I didn't know you lived in Malaysia! I'd be very curious to hear more about that country, for sure!
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LOL and so is everybody, my muse. Knowing Ritchiesszky, many wants to know about Malaysia now. Luckily we don't live on trees anymore, LOL. It is a country full of sunshine, pristine beaches and street food is available 24/7. "Bites of delights" can be found here. A few others have asked me to write about it - in due time I promised (don't want to get arrested just yet). One of the 10 most beautiful Island is located here and featured in one old James Bond 007 movie (Tioman Island), LOL. Well if you and you family can come over, I can be the tour guide for free, LOL.
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Well it sounds like you have a whole intriguing source to write about there Ritchie! (though I have heard the government is pretty authoritarian)!
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Yes, you are right. Laws are strict here e.g. mandatory death sentence for possession of firearms without a licence (guns outlawed),and possession of large quantities illegal drug like heroin (smaller quantity meant whipping and so on). Other than these stringent laws, the rest are easy pies one can get away using money, LOL. I don't have much money except fake member dollars and sense from FS, so I need borrow from my friends (LOL). Cheers.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem is reality to everyone who has watched their kids grow past them and become adults somehow while we were not looking. It is also evident that my dad haunts my mirror.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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This poem is reality to everyone who has watched their kids grow past them and become adults somehow while we were not looking. It is also evident that my dad haunts my mirror.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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You'd be amazed at how many haunted mirrors there are in the world Bill! :) Sharyn
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good look at aging. I didn't mind turning fifty... it was a wonderful time in my life. Even sixty was okay. But now as seventy approaches and I have a terminal illness, old age shows its true face... preparation for death, winding down. People shouldn't get old and sick... they should just shut down one day and not wake up. Would be so much easier. Sorry for getting depressing.. just not having a good day. Enjoy life while you can. And I know YOU will. I did... at least I have no regrets. :)
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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Very good look at aging. I didn't mind turning fifty... it was a wonderful time in my life. Even sixty was okay. But now as seventy approaches and I have a terminal illness, old age shows its true face... preparation for death, winding down. People shouldn't get old and sick... they should just shut down one day and not wake up. Would be so much easier. Sorry for getting depressing.. just not having a good day. Enjoy life while you can. And I know YOU will. I did... at least I have no regrets. :)
Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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I agree with you 100% Phyllis - and honestly ... REALLY honestly ... I think getting old and sick SUCKS. It makes me angry when I can't do the things I'm used to doing. Writing about it helps - but I'm writing about an ideal which, frankly, I still see in only small glimpses, dammit!