My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 121 "Anxiety."All of my poems of release.
8 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. I love the subject. It is sad and hard when one disorder can take over your life. You feel you are normal in every other way. Great work.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I love the subject. It is sad and hard when one disorder can take over your life. You feel you are normal in every other way. Great work.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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It is so debilitating for the sufferer. Thanks for your kind review ellie.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi,
Well written with good rhyme and rhythm and the requirements met for this contest. I hope this poem isn't from true experience as anxiety is a difficult thing to deal with. Best wishes in this contest.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Hi,
Well written with good rhyme and rhythm and the requirements met for this contest. I hope this poem isn't from true experience as anxiety is a difficult thing to deal with. Best wishes in this contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thanks again mtnspirit, you reviews are always appreciated.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. Excellent job writing about facing anxiety. I enjoyed your rhyming pattern and the delivery of your voice especially, in the anticipation of trying again on a new day. Good luck and cheers.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Hello. Excellent job writing about facing anxiety. I enjoyed your rhyming pattern and the delivery of your voice especially, in the anticipation of trying again on a new day. Good luck and cheers.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2012
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Thanks once again Benjamin, always a pleasure to have you review.
Comment from prayingpoet
Anxiety is very difficult to deal with and you captured the feelings of sadness and sorrow a person feels when going though this emotion. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Anxiety is very difficult to deal with and you captured the feelings of sadness and sorrow a person feels when going though this emotion. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Bayberry
I've only had a couple of mild anxiety situations and they weren't comfortable at all because of the additional feeling of lack of control. Your writing is very strong and meaningful.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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I've only had a couple of mild anxiety situations and they weren't comfortable at all because of the additional feeling of lack of control. Your writing is very strong and meaningful.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much Silhouette Effect for your lovely review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
The poem vividly describes anxiety and the horrors it brings. It is a condition we cannot rationalize nor understand the cause. It gives one much to think about. You have stated it well.
"Another day's upon us,
I'll try again today.
This fear I'll will dispel,
I truly hope and pray."
In the last stanza, I'll will is awkward. I suggest you change I'll to I.
Godspeed,
Curtis
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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The poem vividly describes anxiety and the horrors it brings. It is a condition we cannot rationalize nor understand the cause. It gives one much to think about. You have stated it well.
"Another day's upon us,
I'll try again today.
This fear I'll will dispel,
I truly hope and pray."
In the last stanza, I'll will is awkward. I suggest you change I'll to I.
Godspeed,
Curtis
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much Curtis, much appreciated. I missed that typo and I thank you for pointing it out to me.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written, heart-wrenching poem conveys the emotions of one whose fears of past and present have rendered her agorophobic. Very good
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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This well-written, heart-wrenching poem conveys the emotions of one whose fears of past and present have rendered her agorophobic. Very good
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you Janice, I appreciate your time reviewing my poem.
Comment from phill doran
Hello there
Directly written - easy enough rhyme scheme although I found 'mooted' a bit contrived...still a small point as I enjoyed this read.
You might want to consider the ABAB rhyme scheme when working on pieces like this (as there is an ABAB competition on the site shortly)Just an idea.
I would suggest you look at the third line of the last verse - you have "...I'll will..." and I am sure you did not mean this.
I wish you well with your writing
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hello there
Directly written - easy enough rhyme scheme although I found 'mooted' a bit contrived...still a small point as I enjoyed this read.
You might want to consider the ABAB rhyme scheme when working on pieces like this (as there is an ABAB competition on the site shortly)Just an idea.
I would suggest you look at the third line of the last verse - you have "...I'll will..." and I am sure you did not mean this.
I wish you well with your writing
cheers
phill
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you for point that out Phil i did miss that when reading it over. Thanks also for your kind and honest review.