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Comment from Mai Mai
This is a very interesting piece. It is very well done and well thought out. It's darkness makes it a powerful piece. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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This is a very interesting piece. It is very well done and well thought out. It's darkness makes it a powerful piece. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 30-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2012
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Thank you Mai Mai
Comment from tinlight
Sometimes we fall in love despite ourselves, at the most innopportune moment. Been there, done that, despised myself for it as a spineless fool. It didn't make the slightest bit of difference!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Sometimes we fall in love despite ourselves, at the most innopportune moment. Been there, done that, despised myself for it as a spineless fool. It didn't make the slightest bit of difference!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your review tinlight
Comment from Rondeno
I like it very much. May I suggest one tiny change? Why not make the last line, "Be kind to me. I don't die well"? This would smoothe out the meter, and give a terseness to the sense.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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I like it very much. May I suggest one tiny change? Why not make the last line, "Be kind to me. I don't die well"? This would smoothe out the meter, and give a terseness to the sense.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your review, I can't change it because then it would not have the right amount of words required
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Of course. How stupid of me!
Comment from angel123
What can I say clever, clever, clever. I really enjoyed reading your poem and your artwork choice is excellent. Keep writing.
angel123
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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What can I say clever, clever, clever. I really enjoyed reading your poem and your artwork choice is excellent. Keep writing.
angel123
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for the six star rating angel123
Comment from gazzagodbod
love the approach of the spider you captured my friend and the words make for a great read thank you so much and all the best gazza
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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love the approach of the spider you captured my friend and the words make for a great read thank you so much and all the best gazza
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you gazza
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi,
What a unique entry. Your poem is right on with the syallable count and your poetry has clear understanding. Good job and thank you for sharing. Best wishes with this contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Hi,
What a unique entry. Your poem is right on with the syallable count and your poetry has clear understanding. Good job and thank you for sharing. Best wishes with this contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your review
Comment from sgalletti
Wow! Great choice of art work and terrific metaphor in this piece. It isn't easy to communicate a meaningful message in a poem with these rstrictions and limitations. But you did! Good luck. Sue
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Wow! Great choice of art work and terrific metaphor in this piece. It isn't easy to communicate a meaningful message in a poem with these rstrictions and limitations. But you did! Good luck. Sue
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you sue
Comment from Janet Foor
Your six line poem, 'Trapped' is very creative. Great use of the "less" words to express your message. Very nice six line poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Your six line poem, 'Trapped' is very creative. Great use of the "less" words to express your message. Very nice six line poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you jmf1419
Comment from RYME4U
I like the message in this. Alot can be said in few words. The idea of the spider in the web is a clever way to express your thoughts.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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I like the message in this. Alot can be said in few words. The idea of the spider in the web is a clever way to express your thoughts.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Glad you liked ' Trapped '
Comment from mauial
Cowardness is three sylabbles, so you might want to change that to meet the requirements of the prompt. I like the thought though of the poem.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Cowardness is three sylabbles, so you might want to change that to meet the requirements of the prompt. I like the thought though of the poem.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Okay