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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Stumped"Inspiration of Life from Photographs
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Comment from poetbear
I really enjoyed this.
Well written with great imagery.
It is a smart pem that makes you think.
I am so sorry I have never read your work before but that changes now.
Flows and reads well.
Makes so much sense.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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I really enjoyed this.
Well written with great imagery.
It is a smart pem that makes you think.
I am so sorry I have never read your work before but that changes now.
Flows and reads well.
Makes so much sense.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you poetbear for the friendly visit and nice review. I only joined the site recently so I'm not surprised you haven't run across me earlier. Looking forward to many future visits. I too am fairly new at retirement. This site provides excellent brain stimulation and encouragement.
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I have applied but waiting on approval for my retirement but will still wrk part-time.
May cousin lives in your state.
Enjoy everyday!
Comment from Simple Reflection
I don't think I would have seen the alligator without your help; but, yes, I can see it! You've written a creative poem to go with this most interesting photo! I liked the idea of being terrorized by a stump! -smile-
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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I don't think I would have seen the alligator without your help; but, yes, I can see it! You've written a creative poem to go with this most interesting photo! I liked the idea of being terrorized by a stump! -smile-
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you, Simple
Comment from visionary1234
How very brave of you to turn this into a sonnet, of all things! goodness! I've never seen one used to tell a story before - they're usually more reflective ... but what the heck, why NOT? :) s
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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How very brave of you to turn this into a sonnet, of all things! goodness! I've never seen one used to tell a story before - they're usually more reflective ... but what the heck, why NOT? :) s
Comment Written 29-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012
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Thank you, visionary. Always ready to experiment.
Comment from Gungalo
Hi Treischel. What a wonderfully funny story you tell. Unfortunately it is not in iambic pentameter and it needs to be for the contest. It still gave you a five for I'm in love with the story.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Hi Treischel. What a wonderfully funny story you tell. Unfortunately it is not in iambic pentameter and it needs to be for the contest. It still gave you a five for I'm in love with the story.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much. I hope I can fix it, I thought I had it. Appreciate your feedback.
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Smile.
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I can see a couple of lines that my throw you, but the still are iambic pentameter, so: With MELlow CHEER, time PASSED, imBIBing Wine. When SUDden Stark silHOUettes CLEARly CAME Do ALlliGAtors LIVE in YONder PARK? Two TROUbaDOURS turned INto CRAven CHUMPS! TerRORized! QUAKng! FRIHGtened BY some STUMPS! What am I missing?!
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When SUDden Stark (silHOUettes) CLEARly CAME Do ALlliGAtors LIVE in YONder PARK?
(TerRORized!) QUAKng! FRIHGtened BY some STUMPS
You've stressed the wrong syllables here.
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Ok thanks. I think I get it
People say TERrorIZED
Not terRORized
I'll work on it
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Smile.
Comment from mystery poet
I find your notes very interesting and your
sonnet even more so. The pic does look quite
like an alligator with mouth open and ready
to feast. The story is so entertaining. Thanks.
Best wishes!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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I find your notes very interesting and your
sonnet even more so. The pic does look quite
like an alligator with mouth open and ready
to feast. The story is so entertaining. Thanks.
Best wishes!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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You made my day with such a glowing review. Thank you.
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Good! I am pleased that my words
well received by writer...LOL
Comment from kashmayank
nice well structured poem length was perfect,the message was nice and I enjoyed reading it ,the flow of words was smooth and that increased the appeal
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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nice well structured poem length was perfect,the message was nice and I enjoyed reading it ,the flow of words was smooth and that increased the appeal
Comment Written 27-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much kash
Comment from alexisleech
I really liked this. It's amazing how frightening simple things can look in the dark, as your excellent poem proves. As a woman, it also appeals to my sense of humour. The idea of grown men being frightened by a tree stump tickles my fancy!
Alexis x
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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I really liked this. It's amazing how frightening simple things can look in the dark, as your excellent poem proves. As a woman, it also appeals to my sense of humour. The idea of grown men being frightened by a tree stump tickles my fancy!
Alexis x
Comment Written 27-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Glad you liked it. Thanks for the encouragement.
Comment from clsandau
This was a fun poem - animated still is new to me, but thoroughly enjoyable. I wrote one about two granddaughters who got caught up in this, thinking it was a bear in the twilight, turned out to be twigs resembling same. Amazing what our imaginations do. Thanks and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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This was a fun poem - animated still is new to me, but thoroughly enjoyable. I wrote one about two granddaughters who got caught up in this, thinking it was a bear in the twilight, turned out to be twigs resembling same. Amazing what our imaginations do. Thanks and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the nice review and sharing the story about the twigs.
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
IN the dark that could definately look like a hungry alligator!! Great photo, great sonnet. Meter is off in a few lines but the story is great.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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IN the dark that could definately look like a hungry alligator!! Great photo, great sonnet. Meter is off in a few lines but the story is great.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much Dawn
Comment from Rondeno
This is written with your customary skill, and (of course!) bears witness to your love of the natural world. there's even a dash of humor in there, too! Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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This is written with your customary skill, and (of course!) bears witness to your love of the natural world. there's even a dash of humor in there, too! Well done.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thanks for you encouragement