Comment from expressions9

Excellent

Your poem is interesting, with a good layout and appropriate photo. I like your first stanza

"There's a myriad of
thoughts,
running through my brain,
tumbling,
stumbling,
driving me insane."

The mind is such a busy place, overwhelmed by so many rushing thoughts. No wonder we need to give ourselves a break, relax and refresh.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012

Thanks so much for your kind review :) Jaq x

reply by expressions9 on 06-Nov-2012

You're welcome :)

Comment from vigabo

Good

Loved the first half of this poem. So well structured. Rhythm flows perfectly with not a word out of step. This flow faltered just a little in the second half. I think dropping "to" in the last line would improve this and nothing would be lost sense-wise. Just a suggestion. Otherwise, great!

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012

Thanks vigabo, I will definitely look at that. Your help is much appreciated. :) Jaq x

reply by vigabo on 06-Nov-2012

Thanks for replying.

Comment from mizzkris20

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. I don't meditate often but

should. I like the flow of your poem. You have a great rhythm

and the flow is perfect.The rhythm is cute....Overall Good job

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012

Cheers mizzkris, thanks for your great appraisal. :) Jaq x

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes I liked this Tumultuous is a good sounding word for the title I have never seen this word but assume it might mean confused or mixed up . This poem my friend is well written sometimes we do get muddled not knowing which way to turn meditation can be the answer to calm a person down I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

So glad you enjoyed this one Jill and your reviews are always appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from October21

Excellent

I haven't tried meditiation! If it's like it is in this poem, then it sure is worth it! Stress relieving, I suppose:)

Love the last two lines, with some comparisons to fire and ice hinted:)

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Thanks October for you wonderful reviews. :) Jaq x

Comment from Earl of Oxford

Excellent

Hi, Jaq.

Lots of 'm' sounds throughout, and they're all apt.

I think most us creative types, like writers, think and worry too much.

I really like this, except for the ending which I found a bit tame and forced with the rhyme.

Maybe something like:

To help me find my
inner peace,
I need to cool it
not to burn

Just me having an irritating fiddle. LOL

Best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

LOL Ray, irritate away. I changed it from my original ending and you're right it isn't just right. I do like yours tho'. Thanks Ray xx

Comment from Joy Graham

Exceptional

I like the flow of this poem :) You have a great rhythm and your rhymes are a cute touch. I see this as cute and a wee bit humorous just because of the rhythm and rhyme. I am a little strange today, I know. Sorry about that. Don't mean to offend. I just really like this poem :)

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Thanks so much Joy, no offence at all. :) Your review and very kind rating are much appreciated. Jaq x

Comment from Spike the second

Excellent

Meditation Jaq sounds ideal.

I just wish I had time. These days I am either working or reading and writing on here. But I thrive on it. I also get the myriad of thoughts and ideas and wake up in the night and write those ideas down. The wife thought I was a burglar the other night and had a blue fit. I was stood with the curtains open, for light, writing about my bloody ugly mermaid LOL :).

Super stuff Jaq

Blessings

Spike

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2012

Lol Spike, I did this one in bed last night too. :) Jaq x