Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

You have used some good onomatopoetic words and fun wordplay for the alert. Some of this could be an illusion to the story great expectations. It takes a turn of tone as it gets closer to the end.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023

Thanks so much. I'm glad you could enjoy this. Gretchen

reply by Liz O'Neill on 30-Aug-2023

Well done

Comment from Thesis

Excellent

LOL, good one. I enjoyed your story. It was well written and kept my interest, You were able to build up the suspense using the Witch's statements and weaved the plot into her comments. Nice job.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023

Thank you. Love fun spooky. Love a twist in a story. I appreciate your review. Gretchen

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

I enjoyed this very much. I do not always make the right decisions about writing; we're all learning on this site. But, when I write a short story, i wonder how it should be told: In first person? In third person?
I only mention this as I would like to see this written in third person. There are few extra things you can do, then, especially the ending, to make it more dramatic. Such as :"He never saw that cane rising over his head".

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023

I use first person because it feels natural to me. That's why. It's easier to keep up with the view point. Occasionally I'll do third person. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen

reply by jim vecchio on 19-Aug-2023

There's nothing wrong with first person. I use it, too. Just pointing out how a decision could subtly change a story. I think you're a great writer!

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Yikes. We don't do Halloween much over here, so I am a bit out of the loop in that regard, but it's a well written and creepy story, with a not-so good ending for the reporter!!
Wendy

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023

Thanks, Wendy. Fall/Halloween is a big deal here in the States. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

I'm still a kid who loves Halloween and Christmas and seeing the smiles on all the little one's faces. Outstanding story and I enjoyed every line. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023

Thanks very much. I love holidays. I'll even hug a tree on arbor day. Lol. Gretchen

reply by Ric Myworld on 15-Aug-2023

I have hugged a few trees in my day. But honestly, it was a different reason. :-)

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

You are getting us ready for Halloween. What a clever and tricky witch. She doesn't have to hunt if her prey is so willing to just show up on the doorstep and practically beg to be let in.
Well done. Thanks for reviving this one.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023

Shes old school witch. Scary not sexy. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen

reply by w.j.debi on 15-Aug-2023

Yep. Wizard of Oz type. Wart and all.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Of course, I enjoyed reading. I am pretty sure we can figure out what happened. We now have a missing reporter. Thank you for sharing this story with us.

I decided that flattery and a bit of buttering up would help me in getting her to open up. (you can omit 'that')

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023

Thanks very much. Glad you were able to enjoy this. Gretchen

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Nicely structured and, like the best horror, most amusing at the same time. You're a clever writer! Well done. I look forward to more, always.

John

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023

Thank you, John. I appreciate your nice words. Gretchen

Comment from John Ciarmello

Exceptional

I loved it!
It was simple, perfectly characterizing the reporter and the witch. The best part of any read is when you don't see events coming until it is too late to figure them out! Great work with this one! I wish you much success with the contest, Gretchen! Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023

Thanks so much, John. I'm not entering it in anything. It's from 2012. Just revisiting old works. But thank you. Gretchen

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Wow Gretchen, this is scary and I hung on your every word here and I had a feeling no good would come from this intimate and chilling interview, a fine post for Halloween Gretchen, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023

Thank you. I wrote and posted this in 2012. Didn't get much coverage but I always liked it. Love that she blames Elizabeth Montgomery for the downfall of the with. Thank you for this. Gretchen