Reclamation.
Deathbed visions pave the way.15 total reviews
Comment from geetika sethi
dallas , a wonderfully creative piece of poetry this is .
it so intriguing ,that the colour scheme as well as the choice of words are so appropriate.
i like it through and through.
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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dallas , a wonderfully creative piece of poetry this is .
it so intriguing ,that the colour scheme as well as the choice of words are so appropriate.
i like it through and through.
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Thanks so much for taking the time to review.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Simply beautiful! Very well written with a smooth and even flow, great rhymes not forced. Love the imagery throughout. Very nice work!
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Simply beautiful! Very well written with a smooth and even flow, great rhymes not forced. Love the imagery throughout. Very nice work!
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your poignant piece from the beginning with its confluence of sight and sound. I liked your use of alliteration and your "pole" and "entourage" metaphors. -Joan
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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I admired your poignant piece from the beginning with its confluence of sight and sound. I liked your use of alliteration and your "pole" and "entourage" metaphors. -Joan
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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thanks for reviewing. I liked "pole" too.
Comment from Gungalo
This is a totally beautiful write, girl. It i one that survives everything right up until the end. May you rest in peace.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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This is a totally beautiful write, girl. It i one that survives everything right up until the end. May you rest in peace.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Thanks for reviewing.
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Smiling.
Comment from Chris Tee
This poem "Reclamation" is an absolutely marvelous and excellent poem with a sad topic. Well done indeed with this splendid work.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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This poem "Reclamation" is an absolutely marvelous and excellent poem with a sad topic. Well done indeed with this splendid work.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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thank you for reviewing.
Comment from tinams
Thank you for your wonderful well written poem. I really enjoyed reading it and the picture you chose to accompany your fine words made for a perfect presentation. A very nice write :) Tina
reply by the author on 29-May-2012
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Thank you for your wonderful well written poem. I really enjoyed reading it and the picture you chose to accompany your fine words made for a perfect presentation. A very nice write :) Tina
Comment Written 29-May-2012
reply by the author on 29-May-2012
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thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Meta~Mark
ok..I found a new word I will have to thesaurus..lol.. A cacophony..thats the one. of memories bounces off the darkened corridors..nicely laced in metaphors this poem along with nature and a secret enchanted garden theme.
excellent!
reply by the author on 29-May-2012
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ok..I found a new word I will have to thesaurus..lol.. A cacophony..thats the one. of memories bounces off the darkened corridors..nicely laced in metaphors this poem along with nature and a secret enchanted garden theme.
excellent!
Comment Written 29-May-2012
reply by the author on 29-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from artemis53
My, Dallas. Incredible imagery. I especially liked "Lila slinking down the passageway on the pole of her indiscretions." That's pretty powerful to me.
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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My, Dallas. Incredible imagery. I especially liked "Lila slinking down the passageway on the pole of her indiscretions." That's pretty powerful to me.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Solacium Mariae
Excellent poem. It's beautifully written. I'm not sure I have a complete interpretation yet, but that isn't always necessary.
A question - is "Lila" lilac?
My only critique is the video--I don't think it adds anything to your poem, and in facts takes away from it because Clair de Lune so overly played and this particular rendition is not very good in video quality or performance.
Thank you for a beautiful poem to read!
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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Excellent poem. It's beautifully written. I'm not sure I have a complete interpretation yet, but that isn't always necessary.
A question - is "Lila" lilac?
My only critique is the video--I don't think it adds anything to your poem, and in facts takes away from it because Clair de Lune so overly played and this particular rendition is not very good in video quality or performance.
Thank you for a beautiful poem to read!
Comment Written 28-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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Thank you for reviewing. Lilac can be assumed they are the names of her twin daughters. Your question caused me to re-look. An entire stanza was missing that eluded to that. I re-entered it. thanks again.
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oh, well that's good! I guess I'll go re-read!
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I have a more complete interpretation now; that makes much more sense! Now, because I'm no botanist, I'm trying to think of what would be the parent plant.
Comment from Scott Benner
I enjoyed this very much! I'm not much of a gardener but I loved the picture of Lilly waltzing (lilies of the valley???) and Lila slinking (wysteria???). Well, I may be wrong in my identifications but I was happily immersed in your garden. Scott
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I enjoyed this very much! I'm not much of a gardener but I loved the picture of Lilly waltzing (lilies of the valley???) and Lila slinking (wysteria???). Well, I may be wrong in my identifications but I was happily immersed in your garden. Scott
Comment Written 28-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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I was missing an entire stanza that explains. I reentered. they are her twin daughters.