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Idol Adventures

Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Home stinkin' home"
Based on personal African experience via Hollywood

4 total reviews 
Comment from mr elis
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This is a wonderful fiction paper,the character went through so many stages,he remembers actors and actress of yesterday and today, even mentioned a female-who was the second on board,in the last election.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
    Thanks!
Comment from ScarletClearwater
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This was an absorbing read. Great job with the use of descriptives, as they lent to great imagery, which made the piece flow nicely.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
    Thanks!
Comment from Crystal Carey
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LOL It was very funny. I did enjoy reading this chapter. Although I wish it had been broken up a bit more, maybe separate the end into a new chapter.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
    I think you're right. I do have difficulty choosing chapter breaks. Thanks, I'll work on it!
Comment from Misrael
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For the life of me I could not figure out what this was all about. It was very confusing and I was never able to figure it out. If you could help me understand what it is about it would help. Keep on writing.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2012

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
    Wondering if you read all four chapters?